Celebrities affect on Young adults more than elderly people.Do you agree or disagree.
Undoubtedly, entertainers play an essential role of people's live. Some people believe the famous athletes interact and affect on younger people and capable of changing their lives. In contrary, others challenge this idea. As far as I am concerned, in my opinion, I agree that celebrities have a significant effect on younger individuals of two generations. The teenagers usually try to copy their styles, while younger adults interact more with athletes and copy their activities, on the other and older population, are mature enough to be attracted to them. Following is a brief explanation of my view.
First of all, I believe children between age two and age seventeenth copy many famous celebrities such as actors and singers who play a massive impact on that particular age of the younger generation. Unfortunately, most of this effect is negative. Those kids always try to take them as their models in life; therefore, they would mimic their style in many ways. A good example for this is my son, he and all of his peers at the school likes one a famous young Canadian celebrity; his name is Justin Beiber. Furthermore; he amused with his albums. Also, he copies his hairstyle, his customs, and his perfumes are the same, too. I can not convince him that it is wrong because when I was same age of him, Madona was my favorite and I did the same and might be worse.
Secondly, I think athletes affect on those younger adults more often than elderly people or Youngs. Usually, they are capable of attracting those young individuals to practice the same exercise of them which in my opinion positive and healthy thing to their bodies. For example, my brother is amusing, or you can say he is an addict to the soccer games. His model is Ronaldinho; one of Real Madrid football team player. You can see his hair, his closet, and his room decoration all talk about that particular player. Besides, he is practicing throwing the ball in regular bases. He has a healthy athletic body.
Least but not the last, elderly people,; in general, are mature enough to think about those inspiring people. Their lives are busy enough to think about those minorities. For instance, I feel I am one of those old adults who try to steal the free time to relax. In fact, my daily life is super-busy. I stuck between my job and my house responsibilities. I do not have sufficient peaceful time for myself. It is hard for me to find any attraction to any actress or athletes.
All in all, young generation put a close attention to those famous celebrities than adult people do.
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Essay evaluation report
on the other and older population, are mature enough
on the other hand older populations are mature enough
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use 'however' to show different ideas:
Least but not the last, elderly people,; in general, are mature enough
However, elderly people, in general, are mature enough
be sensitive to use pronouns like: 'them'
to be attracted to them.
to practice the same exercise of them
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2048 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.582 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.964 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.411 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.464 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.258 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.434 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Undoubtedly, entertainers play an essent...
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Line 2, column 122, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...elieve the famous athletes interact and affect on younger people and capable of changing ...
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Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...n age two and age seventeenth copy many famous celebrities such as actors and singers who play a m...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...n celebrity; his name is Justin Beiber. Furthermore; he amused with his albums. Also, he co...
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Line 3, column 703, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rong because when I was same age of him, Madona was my favorite and I did the sam...
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Line 4, column 28, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...t be worse. Secondly, I think athletes affect on those younger adults more often than el...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ;
... Least but not the last, elderly people,; in general, are mature enough to think ...
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Line 6, column 61, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...neration put a close attention to those famous celebrities than adult people do.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.202357563851 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.133595284872 0.158761421928 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.123772102161 0.0866891130778 143% => OK
Adverbs: 0.041257367387 0.046263068375 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.110019646365 0.0685040099705 161% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.098231827112 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0137524557957 0.0351676179071 39% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.69330233226 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275049115914 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0805500982318 0.0887237588012 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0098231827112 0.0209618222197 47% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00785854616896 0.0139019557991 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2567.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74272930649 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319910514541 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.234899328859 0.251872472559 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.156599552573 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0984340044743 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69330233226 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530201342282 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 61.6949359973 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6684587814 135% => OK
Sentence length: 15.9642857143 20.5533526081 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5567461518 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6785714286 120.699889404 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9642857143 20.5533526081 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.644075263715 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 39.4542186002 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.10344827586 1.45489161554 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15533337088 0.300154397459 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.06808596967 0.103427244359 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0835970458267 0.0752933317313 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.390340963214 0.497263757937 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170494976784 0.151897553556 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451810332169 0.114077575197 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800437459141 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.302982429291 0.336927656856 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0915050431637 0.067059652881 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114524158271 0.210909579961 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058936748305 0.0618886996521 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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