celebrities' point of view is more important for young people in comparison to older people
Today, as it is commonly sensed, celebrities' point of view has absolutely essential role in people's lives. Some individuals are of the opinion that they are more important for young people in comparison to older people, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that they are equally important to all young and old people. I, personally, subscribe to the idea of former group. The incomparable energy and activeness of younger people and also the period of life in which they live, substantiate my idea.
In first place, as we know, every activity is in demand of a level of energy, and following celebrities' opinion and lives are no exception. It is not to mention that human beings equipped with high energy which is a priceless blessing for them. By keeping this in mind, we can say with utmost confidence that they can pursue others' lives and perspective throughout reading them on the internet. Roughly all of them have joined in at least a social network which makes them be interested to view of celebrities. Nowadays, most contexts of social networks are about famous people and make them really attractive to know more about, so it gives all followers a good chance to follow their interested people among celebrities. In contrast, older people spend less time in social networks, because of that they not only do find star people very important, but also they cannot b up to date with famous individuals around the world.
Secondly, one of the biggest reasons of people which result in see celebrities' perspective essential is individuals are at the search of the way of live. It goes without saying that younger people are in their prime of life in which they want to learn more and more. Celebrities are without any shadow of doubt a good choice for them to do so. They want to be a success person in their future, so it is not surprising that famous people and what have made their life flourishing be important to younger individuals. By contrast, older ones are full of experiences, and most of them found their way of lives. There is a Persian proverb says that old people have tasted cold and warm condition of life. In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that celebrities are more important in young people's eyes than older ones because they are more subjected to social networks, and on top of this they want to find a way by which their future lives will be thrived.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that celebrities are more important in young people's eyes than older ones because they are more subjected to social networks, and on top of this they want to find a way by which their future lives will be thrived. Who, in his right mind, can deny the effect of networks on peoples' lifestyle and the impact of celebrities' opinion on young people?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...y sensed, celebrities point of view has absolutely essential role in peoples lives. Some individuals...
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Line 2, column 93, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...and of a level of energy, and following celebrities opinion and lives are no exception. It ...
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Line 6, column 333, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ind, can deny the effect of networks on peoples lifestyle and the impact of celebrities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, at least, in contrast, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70824949698 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55193931848 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.9376417709 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.157894737 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1578947368 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367164335636 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120440506326 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887483397485 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276373196335 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826275890158 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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