There is no doubt that playing plays the key role in children’s lives. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of playing. It is a no-brainer that playing helps children grow better and makes them more creative. Playing can prepare children for their future life, so playing is one of most important part in their lives. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that it is good for children to play video games for fun and amusement. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that it is good for children to play outside with their friends or play with physical toys. From my own perspective, the second belief is true. I hold this because of two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that playing outside with their friends boost their communication skills. It goes without saying that one of momentous things that children should learn is communication skills. They need to have a good social relationships in their future lives to become successful and prosperous. Playing paves the way for children to make a connection with others. They learn how they should behave to impress others. Besides that they find good friends for their lives. A research conducted recently in the Netherlands revealed that having a good social networks in the childhood is one of momentous factors in children's happiness. They recommended that parents should pay attention to this issue and find good friends for their children.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that playing outside is good for children's physical and mental health. Needless to say that children are in the critical age. They should have a lot of physical activity to stimulate their muscles and their brains. Although sedentary activities such as video game activate their brain cells, their muscles maintain inactive that can leads to the dire repercussions and disease such as diabetes or even disability.
To make a long story short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that playing outside has a lot of benefits that outweigh the benefits of sedentary games because of increasing their social skills and good for their physical and mental health. All in all, it is recommended that parents limit children's playing with computer or smart phone and compel them to have more physical activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, may, second, so, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09452736318 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62904138753 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477611940299 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8206070481 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0909090909 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.86363636364 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328324623287 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112953844551 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988394275143 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216512960843 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865516977254 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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