A city wants to help teachers of high school students (aged 14-18) to improve their teaching. Which of the following plans do you think is better:
1. Select a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will then attend training courses—led by experienced experts—on how to teach effectively. And when they return to their school, they will share the training with other teachers in their school.
2. Provide online training on how to teach effectively for all high school teachers.
What plans should a city adopt when it comes to improving high school education arouses a heated debate. Some people claim that selecting a small group of excellent teachers to attend training courses is the best method to improve educators' teaching, while others maintain that providing online training courses for all high school teachers is better. As far as I am concerned, I believe the first option is better. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, high school students usually have lots of homework and projects to do. Hence, high school teachers are usually busy, so adopting the first suggestion can help high school teachers save time and improve their teaching simultaneously. Take the city where I live, Taipei, as an example. The Taipei City government required 500 excellent high school lecturers in Taipei to attend an English training course to improve the average quality of English courses. Therefore, since most teacher did not attend, their precious time was not wasted. Furthermore, since these high school teachers could share English-teaching tips with others quickly. Accordingly, one research from the Taipei City government estimated that the average English teaching quality index improved drastically. Contrarily, the Kaohsiung City government decided to let all high school teachers attend an online training course about incorporating computer software into high school curriculums. Nevertheless, they wasted 8 hours per week on that training course. As a result, nearly 60% of the teachers complained that they did not have enough time to grade students' assignments, prepare for teaching materials, etc. So apparently, forcing every high school teacher to attend a training course is not an advisable idea.
In addition, high school students are exceptionally concerned about teaching materials. Thus, high school educators should always improve teaching materials, but attending online training courses will not help teachers improve their teaching materials. Take my brother's high school as an example. During the Covid-19 pandemic, the Hualien County government required all teachers to participate in an online training courses about adopting animations. To elaborate, the Ministry of Education hoped that every high school teacher can teach all subjects using self-made animations. Nevertheless, the network quality held by the Ministry of Education was too slow and fragile that from time to time, the Wifi infrastructure crashed for no reason. As a result, due to the poor quality of the course, these high school lecturers acquired only a little knowledge from the course, and three months later, the government's report indicated that eighty percent of high school teachers in Hualien County did not successfully incorporate animations into the classes. Contrarily, the Taichung City government decided to provide a similar training course physically, and it only required a few teacher to take part in. Consequently, these teachers could ask questions immediately when they had doubts. What', more. when these teachers acquired necessary skills, they could help their colleagues to build animation. Three months, the government did a poll on high school students, and 90% of the students were satisfied with the animations made by their teachers.
In conclusion, I maintain that the first method is the best way to improve high school teaching due to the aforementioned reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1176, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun teacher seems to be countable; consider using: 'few teachers'.
Suggestion: few teachers
...urse physically, and it only required a few teacher to take part in. Consequently, these te...
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Line 5, column 1300, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...ately when they had doubts. What, more. when these teachers acquired necessary skill...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2907.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52661596958 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82422303323 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461977186312 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 861.3 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.285825137 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4814814815 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59259259259 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43033784967 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125086962171 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896215450979 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275266670401 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103038967643 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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