A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18) improve their teaching. Which of following plan is better?
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
class="MsoNormal">In today’s modern life, thanks to technological breakthroughs and cutting-edge innovations in evey aspect of science, the way of education has altered dramatically. In this regard, some people are of the opinion class="that">that teachers with attending to class="other">other teachers’ classes class="can">can provide sufficient information to improve their skills. In contrast, I personally subscribe to the view class="that">that class="it">it class="will">will be more efficiently if teachers class="train">train with online materials. In the following paragraphs, class="my">my reasons class="will">will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
class="MsoNormal">To begin with, teachers are able to learn from online materials due to class="there">there are enormous class="data">data in the class="internet">internet, class="which">which includes others’ experiences. To be more specific, teachers throughout the world maight encouter similar difficuties and problems. they tend to share class="it">it on the class="internet">internet. Therefore, teaches with online materials class="can">can class="access">access others’ solutions, class="which">which has segnificant roles for tackling a class="problem">problem. An example darws this notion home. class="my">my mother was a high class="school">school class="teacher">teacher and her students were used to cheat in homeworks. After class="she">she realize the class="problem">problem, class="she">she sought to the class="internet">internet and class="she">she class="could">could find out many teachers always struggled with these problems. Then, class="she">she chose the most practical solution and tried to accomplish class="it">it in her class. hence, had class="she">she not have a chance to search in the class="internet">internet and just ask her colegious, class="she">she class="could">could not have found the best tackle.
class="MsoNormal">Another reason is class="that">that teachers have not numerous of time to attend class="other">other’s classes and be trained by experts. Needless to say, the class="internet">internet is more accessible than others’ class. In fact, whenever teachers have time, they class="can">can search in the class="internet">internet and use online courses. For instance, teachers have more free time in the aftrenoon to focus on improvemt their skills. On the class="other">other hand, class="there">there is no demand to go class="other">other schools and waist thier time. they are usually more comfortable to concentrate on studying and being educated when their mind relaxes in their hoom . hence, they class="can">can deal with matters more efficiently when they are watching video cources online or in their TV.
class="MsoNormal">Drawing upon the reasons class="that">that I metioned above, I do belive class="that">that the best method for nurturing teachers is to ask them utilize online courses. Not only do they have this opportunity to class="access">access lots of class="data">data, but also their time class="will">will be saved, and they should not dedicate working hours for this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, for instance, in contrast, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3421.0 1977.66487455 173% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 8.5525 4.8611393121 176% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 9.41138608131 2.67179642975 352% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5575 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 909.0 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.3 1.51630824373 152% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8150133308 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.5 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0967995662795 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656482469211 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315695869067 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874875634535 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140031362424 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.9 11.7677419355 237% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -6.01 58.1214874552 -10% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.6 10.1575268817 183% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 32.01 10.9000537634 294% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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