At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus, such as how many hours that the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make this decisions, students almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
Since the dawn of humanity, having social life has considered dramatically. Some people are of the opinion that thanks to the thechnological breakthroughts in every sectiont of science, having enormous expertis, each decision should be taken by a person who has adiquet imformation, while I personaly subscribe to the view that students should be inviolved in cominuities. This practic ads them to cooaporate with each other in large scale and in the small scale fostore their skills. In the following paragraphs, My reasones will be elaborated in on more detail.
To begin with, I can not denay the fact that nowadays,the education is on the policy that each person natures to be a specialist in one filde of study; however, interaction also plays a crusila rule in our social lifes and university is the place which we expect to learn thoes interactions such as cooaporatig, group working, and being resilience, to the name but handful. To delve more into it, freash mans who attent to veriaty of clubs or gropes, for instance, are more capable to find new friands and, than possess the chance to be successful in social life. Moreover, daily life which is directly depands on the life of students, shoule be decided by the residents who live there. it means that should people even expertise who do not have enough experience and knowledge about life on campus take a seriuse decision, it might be have disadvantages, having lack of information about actiual demands and requires. For example, increasing the library houres should be decided by dormitiry residents ratter than othres, because of the direct effects on their wellfare on the end of the semisters.
Secondly, people who learn to intracte with each othesr, and make the best decision impriove their skills too. As a matter of fact, skills arrenging from soial’s to individual’s can be fostered during the tough situations. Apart from that, university indicates to students that they are very valuable and important, whom their beliefs and thoughs has impact on overview of the university. As a case in point, although students may decide to shortage the houres of history classes, for example, and university policies would be oposit to reduce the hours of classes, or they might decide to add fastfoods and junk foods to caffeteria meniu, which are obstacle for their healths, they can learn from the consequences and improve it over the time. Indeed, conversation or conflicts between students can asistant them to express their ideas, persist to those that are goods, and convins others to concurre the ideas and take the responsibilies of that.Therefore, just as they learn to improve their skills, so do they observe and feel results of their decisions and interact its merits and demerits.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although, there are several exceptions that are excluded from jeneral rules, I belive that Involving students to decisions that are generally related to their lifes have seliant advantages. Not only can they cooaporate with each others, resulting to meet and fine friends, but alsothey can improve their skills such as social behaviors; in addition, they would take more responsibilities of theis ideas, hence be mature.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2723.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14744801512 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83369063907 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546313799622 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.4990284925 48.9658058833 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.1875 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0625 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6875 5.45110844103 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2248905489 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074270161011 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474589048816 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141053927854 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507639998202 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 11.7677419355 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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