TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task
Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.
The public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who do not allow the public to view their collections. Making it harder for the public to see fossils can lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, which would be a pity.
More importantly, scientists are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life forms. Wealthy fossil buyers with a desire to own the rarest and most important fossils can spend virtually limitless amounts of money to acquire them. Scientists and the museums and universities they work for often cannot compete successfully for fossils against millionaire fossil buyers.
Moreover, commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Most commercial fossil collectors are untrained or uninterestedin carrying out the careful field work and documentation that reveal the most about animal life in the past. For example, scientists have learned about the biology of nest-building dinosaurs called oviraptors by carefully observing the exact position of oviraptor fossils in the ground and the presence of other fossils in the immediate surroundings. Commercial fossil collectors typically pay no attention to how fossils lie in the ground or to the smaller fossils that may surround bigger ones.
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss the issue of selling and buying fossils by private collectors and the merits and demerits of this purchase. In the reading passage, the author mentions that it makes lots of problems for scientists and the public. In the listening part, however, the speaker challenges what the author states and refutes the reasons.
To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the author sets forth that publics are not able to access to fossils if the wealthy people collect them and keep in their private houses; nevertheless, the professor rebuts the reasons asserting that although it has disadvantages, the author exaggerated its setbacks. Indeed, not only does not it mean that individuals are deprived by private collectors, but also this practice provides fortunate of availability of fossils for even each public institution such as schools and museums. On the other hand,
Secondly, the author points out that scientists who work and study among fossils would have been limited the chance to have a broad perspective of the collections throughout the world. Nonetheless, the speaker flatly contradicts the reasons and contends that private collectors are accustomed to assembling fossils around the world are not allowed to hide fossils without identifying by scientists. it means firstly they should recognize and study fossils, and then elaborated on them by detail examinations. In hence, dinosaur bones cannot pass before an expert hand precept everything precisely.
Finally, the author claims that have them not been on the location of excavations, scientists would miss enormous data. In addition, salient information such as position, presence of other fossils, and biological nest-building would be lost, heeding sharp and abundant fossils rather than smaller ones. In contract, the professor is of the opinion that we have not this opportunity if residents do not interest in finding fossils for a variety of reasons, one of which is fossils would not have been discovered. On the other points of view, we have at least a shortage of data, and the location is not as crucial as identifying the data, even with the price of losing such additional information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'means'?
Suggestion: means
... setbacks. Indeed, not only does not it mean that individuals are deprived by privat...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...sils without identifying by scientists. it means firstly they should recognize and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, at least, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1373.03311258 136% => OK
No of words: 354.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27683615819 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80994367549 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 145.348785872 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553672316384 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4126598748 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.692307692 110.228320801 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2307692308 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4615384615 7.06452816374 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394744025268 0.272083759551 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126906006639 0.0996497079465 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788912437895 0.0662205650399 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2279918636 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307804765451 0.0443174109184 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.3589403974 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 63.6247240618 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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