TPO 53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern life, tanks to technological breakthroughs and cutting-edge innovations in every aspect of science, governments’ concern has altered dramatically. In this line of thought, some people are of the opinion that the governments should consider the internet access, since it has lots of merits for each person. In contrast, I personally subscribe to the view that public transport has played a crucial role in the progress of citizens’ life. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, it is no secret to the fact that all the residents tend to use public transport in their routines; that is why people need it more than the internet access. generally speaking, most of individuals at least one time use public transport; however, many people do not rely on the internet. For example, old generations tend to have a common life, without utilize any high-tech devices requiring the internet. Moreover, they are usually use public transport such as bus and train because they cannot drive cars. As a case in point my grandfather is 90 years old. Neither can he drive, nor has he any smart phone. Therefore, spending money to support public transport seems to be necessary for a variety of people.
Another reason is that with improvement of public transportation, people encounter welfare and confortable life. In fact, it is undeniable that in large cities, people have not to use their personal vehicles because city becomes too crowded. In this circumstance, the government should consider providing better transportation rather than access to the internet. Apart from that, the more public transports people readily access, the less negative consequences the government face with. To put it in other words, people expect their society possess a clean and healthy air, with this, people can experience an easy and comfortable life. Specifically, these facilities help to provide basic demands for citizens. with fostering public transport, the government heed to the essential needs of people. Thus, the drawbacks of living in big cities would be reduced, which seems a vital factor for every society.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from the general rule, I believe that improving public transport is much more salient than access to the internet. Not only does a wide range of citizens use public transport in comparison with the internet, but also it paves the way for the government to provide facilities for residents’ welfare.
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...he internet access. generally speaking, most of individuals at least one time use public transport;...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, apart from, at least, for example, in contrast, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23614457831 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87581452611 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580722891566 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7621272802 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.476190476 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331926232801 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957747925782 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701006747241 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212311290246 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552321320755 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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