TPO 13- Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown

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TPO 13- Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates, has grown into a big business. Rare and important fossils are now being sold to private ownership for millions of dollars. This is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.

Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils they have been doing this since the eighteen century. The passage views this practice in a negative way and the person disagrees with the passage for many reasons.

The reading states that the public will not have access to the fossils since they will be kept in collectors houses. The lecturer disagrees with this because often times the collectors sells the fossils and they sell the fossils to schools and other public entities which allow for more public access. These colectors also sell their collections at reasonable prices. Furthermore more people see the artifacts.

The passage states that these collectors often time prevent scientist from looking at these things. This is because private collectors outbid the universities and museums. And the reading says that scientists do not get a chance to ever look at the fossils. The person disagrees because in order for a fossil to have any value the specimen has to be properly identified and only scientist can accomplish this task. In doing so scientist have access to the fossil and they can study it as well. Finally the writer manifests that the private collectors often go to these sites and destroy the surrounding fossils because they are not careful in the collection process. The man says that having a large quantities of these artifacts is better than not having a large quantity of them. To conclude universities and museums do not go to many of the places to get the fossils.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...entury. The passage views this practice in a negative way and the person disagrees with the passa...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rees with the passage for many reasons. The reading states that the public will ...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hey will be kept in collectors houses. The lecturer disagrees with this because of...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...heir collections at reasonable prices. Furthermore more people see the artifacts. Th...
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Suggestion: Finally,
... fossil and they can study it as well. Finally the writer manifests that the private c...
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Line 9, column 707, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'quantity'?
Suggestion: quantity
...cess. The man says that having a large quantities of these artifacts is better than not h...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... many of the places to get the fossils.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, if, look, so, well, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 252.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03174603175 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49730265169 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488095238095 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 383.4 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3889552529 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5714285714 110.228320801 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423878005435 0.272083759551 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145741119161 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115371745183 0.0662205650399 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302351986565 0.162205337803 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055950154326 0.0443174109184 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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