Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It's not a good idea for teenage children to have a part-time job as a way to prepare them for adult life. I say this for two reasons that will be explained in the following essay.
The first reason as to why a teenage child should not have a part-time job is so that the teenager focus on his/her studies. In my opinion school is to be the main priority for the teenager, all aspects of the oppurtunities that are offered in school must be explored. The different opportunities that a school has are the academic one, the extracurriculum activities such as school clubs, and maybe the student would be interested in sports or volunteering. If the teenager take parts in these different aspects of school then it would be difficult to add a part-time job to the activities. Also the student should focus on getting good grades so that the student gets a better chance of going to a good college.
The second reason why a teenager should not have a part-time job is because the job would take up alot of time. Although having a part-time job might teach the studet to have time management, so would having extracurriculum school activities. Been part of these school activities and having responsibilities in these school activities teaches the student time management as well as providing the student with a chance to socialize with people their own age. The teenage years should be an age of exploration and of getting prepared for college.
In conclusion a teenage child should not have a part-time job to prepare him/her for adult life. The teenage child should focus on school and school related activities. The teenage child should be focused on getting good grades so that the teenager goes to a good college. Things like time management and responsibilites could be obtain through extracurriculum activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, then, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89389067524 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91278575967 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424437299035 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7755947082 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.466666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226576498014 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103709448726 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933211530226 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185435960371 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791051254711 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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