One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Some people are of the opinion that teenage children should not be prompt to take up a part-time job partly because it may distract them from focusing on their career ambition. However, in my opinion, I believe that parents should facilitate their young children to engage in a part-time job for the following two reasons.
First of all, children should be encouraged to take up part-time jobs in preparing for adult because, part-time job instill some sense of responsibility and the spirit of dependability on the children at that young age. For example, a child that engage with part-time activities together their daily activities like studies and all would be more mature in their thinking that student than student that do not. This is due to the exposure and interaction with many people from different background and experience. In contrast, children that only focus on their day-to-day activities would be limited in their thinking. Research has shown that children that grow up without parent and take up the challenge of taking up part-time job to cater for themselves and their immediate sibling, end up being better place in the future than student that rely solely on their parent to provide their means of survival. These children build the spirit of dependability and self-sufficiency while trying to survive alone. They can make a prompt decision on matter related to their future with little or no consultation from people around them. With this kind of additional trait, I believe children whose parent are alive should be encouraged by their parent to take-up part time jobs in order to be self sufficient at that early stage of their career.
Second of all, another reason why it is best for parents to admonish their teenage children to engaged in part-time job to prepare them for adulthood is that part-time jobs is an avenue for the teenagers to be able to start building their profile in terms of work experience. Work experience would place the children in good standing in a competitive environment as against children without experience. It is clear nowadays that recruiters value experience over academic excellence because they would rather go for an employee that have a certain skill rather than investing on an employee training. If children are encouraged to take up part time jobs, their would gain relevant work experience over their pairs that only focus on academic excellence. For example, I started teaching jobs immediately after my high school, I tutored basic level students and some junior school children to keep my intelligence fresh before entering university. This teaching experience, irrespective of how seemingly insignificant it may be then, helped me in great deal in my university career. I organized tutorial classes for my colleagues as well as lower-level students, which serves as a revision to prepare for semester examination. This skill instills a sense of confidence in me to publicly speak irrespective of the gathering. If I had engaged in a more technical part time job at that time, I would have also retained the skills throughout my career. So, engaging in part time jobs is an opportunity for teenager to gain relevant experience to prepare them for adulthood.
In conclusion, with the above two reasons, I strongly believe that it is important for parents to encourage their children to take up part time jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2830.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08078994614 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82415275114 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464991023339 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 618.680645161 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.4040347699 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.761904762 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5238095238 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468052346829 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154058647061 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118822910583 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326296377707 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295532375509 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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