Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
People hold differing opinion on whether parents should motivate their children to start part-time works. Some people believe that parents should not encourage their kids to get involved in part-time jobs since it will be an extra burden for them. However, I totally agree with the prompt that parents should influence their children to start working even in part-time jobs for the following three reasons.
First of all, getting involved in a part-time job from an early age will help the youngster to develop new skills which will help them to flourish their future career. For instance, when I was in school, my parents motivated me to start essay writing for a local newspaper. Whenever I got spare time, I used to write funny essays for the newspaper. This particular work helped me a lot to strengthen my writing skill. As a consequence, after graduation, I started to work as an editor in a famous newspaper company. I would have not get the job if I didn't write essay from my childhood.
Secondly, a part-time job can help us to earn some extra money, which can be saved for future use. For example, my friend Tom wanted to work in restaurant after school, and his parents also supported his decision. He was able to earn ten dollar each day and saved the money in the bank. Five years later, he bought his long desired by-cycle by his own earned money. This made him confidant and self-depended.
Finally, engaging in different types of work from childhood can teach us to become independent, and assist us to overcome challenges we might encounter in future endeavors. Take my experience as an example, when I was in school, I also worked in a restaurant as a helper of chief sheaf. Gradually, I learned a lot about cooking while doing the job. Few years later, I had to move from my home to the city to study in the University. I had to cook and take care of myself there, but I was never worried since I knew about cooking and other basic tasks. All of my previous experiences made me competent to fulfil my daily obligations and made me independent.
To sum up, I definitely agree that parents should encourage their kids to start part-time jobs because children can develop new skills, earn money, and become independent.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'got', 'gotten'.
Suggestion: got; gotten
...ous newspaper company. I would have not get the job if I didnt write essay from my ...
^^^
Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...pany. I would have not get the job if I didnt write essay from my childhood. Seco...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...d his decision. He was able to earn ten dollar each day and saved the money in the ban...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ls, earn money, and become independent.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72010178117 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61119290368 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521628498728 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1498161979 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240485359415 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715448225151 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765636947069 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149608214375 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780254647587 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'got', 'gotten'.
Suggestion: got; gotten
...ous newspaper company. I would have not get the job if I didnt write essay from my ...
^^^
Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...pany. I would have not get the job if I didnt write essay from my childhood. Seco...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...d his decision. He was able to earn ten dollar each day and saved the money in the ban...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ls, earn money, and become independent.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72010178117 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61119290368 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521628498728 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1498161979 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240485359415 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715448225151 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765636947069 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149608214375 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780254647587 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.