Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that children should be allowed to play video games in computer because the world is movie towards the era of technology and playing games will ensure necessary exposure towards technology. However, in my opinion, I totally agree with the prompt that they should not be permitted to play virtual games in the computer for three reasons.
First of all, most of the games' content are violent in nature and children will try to imitate those visuals in real life, which can be devastating for their future. For example, my friend Jhon used to play a video game named 'Punch Man', there he had to punch people to get points. This particular action was normal for him and whenever he got tempered in the school, he immediately started to punch others. If he hadn't played the game, he might not express these type of malicious behavior. Children are imitative in nature, hence they want to express what they learn in their every day life. For this reason, violent games can negatively affect the behavior of the teenagers and manipulate their action.
Secondly, computer games are addictive in nature and teenagers easily get addicted with this. For instance, I started to play FIFA world cup game with my friends when I was in my school. We used to play the game everyday and it typically took two hours to finish the game. Hence, I started to ignore the night time study regularly and got failed in the term exam. If I didn't ignore my study, I could have easily passed the exam. The algorithm of the games are created to attract and involve the teen. It gives challenges to complete and children become stimulated to complete the task and become top scorer.
Finally, video games are injurious to health and thus children should avoid playing these type of stuffs. Players have to play the games for a longer period of time and hence their eye-sight become vulnerable. A national survey on child health showed that more than 90% children suffer from various eye disease who played games regularly in the computer. In addition, specialist doctors said that children should stay away from playing any games which doesn't involve any physical activity since the negatively impact the cognitive behavior of the teen.
In conclusion, I totally agree with stance that children should stay away from playing any computer games as they are violent, addictive, and injurious to health.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ediately started to punch others. If he hadnt played the game, he might not express t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... in my school. We used to play the game everyday and it typically took two hours to fini...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...y and got failed in the term exam. If I didnt ignore my study, I could have easily pa...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'completing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: completing
...d involve the teen. It gives challenges to complete and children become stimulated to compl...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ers have to play the games for a longer period of time and hence their eye-sight become vulner...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 453, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... stay away from playing any games which doesnt involve any physical activity since the...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88725490196 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35385501045 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1089503822 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301241831051 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975188821541 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070494351432 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200322696707 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658523263158 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ediately started to punch others. If he hadnt played the game, he might not express t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... in my school. We used to play the game everyday and it typically took two hours to fini...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...y and got failed in the term exam. If I didnt ignore my study, I could have easily pa...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'completing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: completing
...d involve the teen. It gives challenges to complete and children become stimulated to compl...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ers have to play the games for a longer period of time and hence their eye-sight become vulner...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 453, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... stay away from playing any games which doesnt involve any physical activity since the...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88725490196 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35385501045 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509803921569 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1089503822 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301241831051 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975188821541 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070494351432 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200322696707 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658523263158 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.