Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Concerning the issue of whether young people participate and help in different community work, people hold different opinion. Some people believe that teenagers are nowadays reluctant to indulge into community works since they are addicted to technological devices and remain isolated from the community. However, I strongly agree with the statement that young people help their community for following two reasons.
First of all, young people are more connected and open minded to participate in community works because of technological advancement. People are connected with each other throughout the world and are interested to do community work whenever they find people of the other part of the world doing something good for their community. Take the example of recent Covid-19 pandemic, which affected the people of almost every country of the world. Through social media, I found that many young people are making teams and doing different sort of works voluntarily to help their community people. Immediately, I made a team of four with my friends and started to distribute hand sanitizer, musk, and awareness leaflet to my community people. This activity indeed strengthen our bond and brotherhood, thanks to the advancement of the technology which motivated us to do so.
Furthermore, Many schools nowadays require mandatory participation in community work to graduate. For this reasons, young people are more involved in the community work instead of wasting their time doing unnecessary works. For instance, when I was in school, our school used to arrange community cleaning program every month. Though students only need to participate once, I loved to participate every month. My friends also participated every month because we were able to communicate more with our community people, and they also loved us so much. Gradually we also involved into different types of works such as blood donation, medical camp, awareness campaign etc. If our school didn't made the community work as a mandatory requirement, we might not be participated in community works.
In conclusion, young people are spending more of their time in doing community works because they become motivated by following other's work through technology and many schools require mandatory community work participation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minded participating'.
Suggestion: minded participating
...oung people are more connected and open minded to participate in community works because of technolog...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...tion in community work to graduate. For this reasons, young people are more involved...
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Line 5, column 685, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
..., awareness campaign etc. If our school didnt made the community work as a mandatory ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4649859944 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83711329375 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495798319328 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0922659289 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.764705882 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275564108299 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104070682292 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844351218108 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19878778239 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519011763757 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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