考满分 toeflTPO-02 Integrated Writing
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Directions: You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically an effective response will be 300 words at least.
Question: Summarise the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made reading passage.
In many organizations, perhaps the best way to approach certain new projects is to assemble a group of people into a team. Having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. First of all, a group of people has a wider range of knowledge，expertise, and skills than any single individual is likely to possess. Also, because of the numbers of people involved and the greater resources they possess, a group can work more quickly in response to the task assigned to it and can come up with highly creative solutions to problems and issues. Sometimes these creative solutions come about because a group is more likely to make risky decisions that an individual might not undertake. This is because the group spreads responsibility for a decision to all the members and thus no single individual can be held accountable if the decision turns out to be wrong.
Taking part in a group process can be very rewarding for members of the team. Team members who have a voice in making a decision will no doubt feel better about carrying out the work that is entailed by the decision than they might doing work that is imposed on them by others. Also, the individual team member has a much better chance to “shine”, to get his or her contributions and ideas not only recognized but recognized as highly significant, because a team’s overall results can be more far-reaching and have greater impact than what might have otherwise been possible for the person to accomplish or contribute working alone.
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The passage talks about how team work is a good thing and provides several examples. While the lecturer points out some negative things about working in a team.
First of all the reading points out that working in a group is a good thing because more knowledge, skills, are brought by all the members of the team. Furthermore all the team members can divide the responsibilities. The professor cast doubts and gives an example of how in one company where working in a group is implemented some people do not work as hard as others. Only a few employees in the group would do the work. But at the end the group as a whole is recognized and not the work of each individual. The lady describes this as a freeride to the employees that did little or not work. also she says that the few members that did most of the work would not happy because proper recognition was not given to them.
Secondly the passage states that the idea of collaboration is good because each individual feels as if they have a say in the work that they are doing as opposed as just having work imposed on them. The lecturer also cast doubts on this because she say's that sometimes the team cannot come up with a decision. this means that the team would take a long time to get the work done or they would get nowhere. Finally the lady mentions how at times she noticed that some teams had influencers, these team members decisions were the ones the group would go by. if the influencers did not agree with an idea, the idea would not go through, even if the idea was a good idea. Another thing that happened is that influencers would say an idea is good and the team would do that idea, even if the idea was a bad idea and if some of the team would voice their disagreement with the idea. In this case if the idea is bad and the team goes through with it the whole team would get blamed for the bad idea.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...od thing and provides several examples. While the lecturer points out some negative t...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...rought by all the members of the team. Furthermore all the team members can divide the res...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...employees that did little or not work. also she says that the few members that did ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 601, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...employees that did little or not work. also she says that the few members that did ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 313, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...e team cannot come up with a decision. this means that the team would take a long t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 410, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...e work done or they would get nowhere. Finally the lady mentions how at times she noti...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 561, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...s were the ones the group would go by. if the influencers did not agree with an i...
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Line 9, column 820, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... even if the idea was a bad idea and if some of the team would voice their disagreement wit...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, another thing, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 356.0 270.72406181 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.30898876404 5.08290768461 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29413570688 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418539325843 0.540411800872 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8181166157 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.875 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334789619602 0.272083759551 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130261751029 0.0996497079465 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525934723816 0.0662205650399 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228390520107 0.162205337803 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675060296399 0.0443174109184 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 53.8541721854 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 12.2367328918 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.72 8.42419426049 80% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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