Small town got extra money. Do you think it is better to spend money to build a park to provide entertainment for everyone in the town, or to build a sports ground for a high school without a sports field?
In today’s modern world, there always has been a controversial topic among people about the notion of which way is best for a government to spend money. In this regard, some people believe that a budget given to a small city should be spent on a high school to build a sports ground. However, I personally subscribe to the view that the money should be spent on all citizens. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, the money should invest in building a park because residents need additional places for entertainment. In this line of thought, not only do high school students reach the benefits, but also other children find a place for playing. generally speaking, thanks to over populations, cities are growing rapidly; governments are responsible for providing equal facilities for all citizens. To put it in other words, all families should access the playground to bring their children to these regions, providing entertainment. For example, I remember that when I was a child, my house was far from any parks and playgrounds, and my mother was forced to bring me there with public transportations. we had to alter three buses to achieve the place. Apart from that, when we always arrived there, we should have come back too soon. Had we had a playground near our house, I could have gone there without my mother, and spent more time there.
Another reason is that it is not really necessary for each high school to have a sports field. they can utilize other schools’ fields. Whit this notion, the government can rent a field for the school, which provides benefits for other high schools too. In fact, there are a variety of tackles, contributing to solving the problem of this school. In contrast, many individuals would possess a healthy entertainment if the government spend the money to build a park. To delve more into it, many young people, nowadays, hang out with their friends in the cafe and restaurants. With a park, they will gain the capability of spending time on recreation grounds and play sports such as tennis, golf, and skate, which is healthier for their physical and mental states. All in all, the more opportunity a city has to provide healthy entertainment for the young generation, the happier and stronger society would be.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, I do believe that the city should have parks and entertainment for all citizens. Not only are most children able to play and have fun, but they also provide a healthy lifestyle, which is accessible for each person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, apart from, as for, as to, for example, in contrast, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85778781038 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.704239948 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530474040632 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6733577194 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8181818182 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1363636364 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306509947458 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885610249667 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731262434231 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188078920202 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658435830194 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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