Do you agree or disagree with this"People in the today’s world have become too dependent on automobiles."
In today’s modern life, thanks to the technological breakthroughs in every section of science, the way of our life has altered dramatically. some people are of the opinion that the technology affects consumerism, hence more dependent on them, while others believe that people just adopted with technology and it does not mean dependency. I personally subscribe to the view that we do not dependent on automobiles as a sample of advanced technology for two main reasons. In the following paragraphs my reasons will be elaborated on in more detail.
To begin with, I could not deny the fact that in today’s world, transportations has modified, contributing to overpopulation. generally speaking, one of the most salient factors of today’s life is increasing the usage of automobiles. However, using more cars do not indicate dependency to them. it means that societies are raised by their demands and enormous cars in streets do not depart from those needs. As a case in point, in populated cities these days, just as automobiles are fulfill roads, so are public transportation crowded too. Tokyo for instance, has such an unbelievable traffic over 24 hours per a day; on the other hand, their subway is always crowded too. Therefore, the more population live the more automobiles exist; hence, dependency is not a reason for car’s consumerism.
Secondly, in the past time, wealthy people utilized horse or wagons instead of cars. In fact, with the advent of cars to the world, it took place of other vehicles; nevertheless, generals could not afford for fancy appliances such as automobiles. Nowadays, as the same as the past, wealthy people have their vehicles. As a matter of fact, in my opinion, it does not change anything than the past. On the other point of view, leading to pollution and global warming, residents tend to use fewer cars to have healthy weather for their future generations. For example, recently I have read an article about Sidney, in which is controlled emission of dangers gas pollution such as carbon dioxide, green houses gas, and toxic fumes by declining of automobile consumption.
Drawing upon the reasons what I mentioned above, although there are always some exceptions excluded from general rules, I believe that not only people do not rely on their cars these days, but also variety of societies attempt to reduce air pollution by decreasing usage of automobiles, although overpopulation put every efforts in different perspective, which needs meticulous attention.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23095823096 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00769216701 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579852579853 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6925709859 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.277777778 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190266291051 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589215460836 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401866162502 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108087781894 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417343600763 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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