The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?
Since the dawn of humanity, education has played a crucial role in the life of people. In this line of thought, some universities spend their extra budget for sport facilities rather than buying books and trying to improve library stuffs. I personally subscribe to the view that it will not be a good idea; in the following paragraphs my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, it is not secret behind the fact that university policies should be based on foster education to pave the way of success for students with the best facilities. generally speaking, students attend to universities for higher education; most of the time, their goal is not learning and practicing sports. spending money on athletic facilities distracts students from studying and seeking for improvement of their knowledge. it would be an interruption for various students, specifically fresh man, if they pay attention to sport rather than their classes. Apart from that, university is not a gym. Put it in other words, old equipment is efficient for students who live in the campus, for example dormitory students, to play, practice, and have healthy life. it means that it does not necessary for universities to dedicate extra money for modification of sport stuffs.
Another reason is that library always demands new and effective devices. In today’s modern life, thanks to technological breakthroughs and cutting-edge innovations in every aspect of science, the way of studying has altered dramatically. In fact, library, these days, is not a place just for books; this place is an important location for universities which should be updated. For instance, accessibility to on-line articles and books, which needs annually fund, should be firstly available in libraries of universities. In addition, one of the most salient factors which students choose a university to attend is libraries. my personal experience is compelling example for this. I have studied my bachelor and master in one university. my reason for choosing again pervious university for higher education was for its library which is the best in our country. All in all, the more updated library each university provides, the more students will attend.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from a general rule, I believe that universities should spend extra money for libraries. Not only is not purpose of universities to provide sport stuffs for students, but also updated libraries make a variety of opportunities for universities to attract new students each year.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, apart from, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26794258373 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91509704838 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538277511962 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5515027406 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.857142857 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228745620124 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772162884954 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597535766622 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161883891938 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383071063593 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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