The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities As a result the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries Do you think this

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The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

It is critically important for the universities that they wisely spend their funds for the betterment of their students. In my opinion, I believe that it is a great notion that the university will spend more money over athletic and sports facilities than on the campus libraries. In the following essay I intend to put forth my arguments to support my view.

To begin with, sports are the crucial department for the university that generates extra source of revenue for it. The university should spends more funds on the athletic activites and make it more better. This increases the extra source of money which could be use for the betterment others important things in the university. For example, the chemistry department of our university was recently renovated and fully equiped with the best experimental appratuss in the labs. This was all possible because of the revenue generated from the sports department of our univeristy. They got so much sponsers for the football match from all over the country from which they collected a handsome amount from it. Therefore, it is better that the university should spend more money on the athletics activites.

In addition, it is better that university should spend more money on sports because this helps the university to outstand among the other univerisites. When the university spend more money on sports, it provides better chance for the students to outshine which brings good reputation for the university and for themselves. This attaracts more students to the university for admissions. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I got admission in University of Willmington on the basis of my skills as the best player in the basket ball. The university is well known for the sports actvities and because of this I got the chance to participate in the interntational basket ball match. This helped me to recognized myself and my university sports department on the international platfrom. I performed very well and secured the first place for my university. As a result, it is more important to spend money over sports for the university than on the campus libraries.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that the university should spend more money on atheltics and sports department than on the campus libraries. This is because it generates more money for the university which could be utilize for campus betterment and because it attracts more students outstand the university over other universites.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11604938272 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86656989873 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.392592592593 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6537264338 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309006947342 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127000472043 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922220509944 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238628430935 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045054421017 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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