Imagine that the administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Would you support this idea? Why or why not?
It is extremely difficult for the university to decide how to spend its funds. In my opinion, the university should spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than on libraries. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in following essay.
To begin with, developments in athletic facilities and a university’s interest in sports like extracurricular activities can attract new students for admission. Many universities place more emphasis on academic programmes than sports activities. Nowadays, students want to admitted to a college or school that has more extracurricular activities and facilities. Sports activities encourage to student who average in academics, but show interest in sports. For example, my cousin is an average academic student who excels in sports. His new college provides facilities for sports. He like football game, so he joined the football team at his college. Also, his college encourages students to participate state-level matches. For this reason, sport facilities attract students to this college.
In addition, sports facilities are more profitable than libraries. Students participate in state-level and country-level games. A sports festival held at a university attract people to visit as spectators. Indeed, these games wining prizes and visiting fees profits to university’s fund. Because of the profit, they can used to be funding other facility development. For example, my college sports profits are used in clinical laboratory equipments updated. These profits really help to our physiology and biochemistry laboratory instruments updated new ones. It is certainly clear to see how sports facilities indirectly develop other facilities in the university.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the university should decide to spend money on sports facilities rather than the library. This is because sports facilities attract new students for admission to university and make profits from games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'use'
Suggestion: use
...s fund. Because of the profit, they can used to be funding other facility developmen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1681.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69830508475 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13268027773 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515254237288 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.14256869 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.4090909091 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4090909091 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235673471385 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835527326762 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823777157306 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186683191822 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060662999845 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.36 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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