The shrimping industry relies on trawls for its harvest Trawls are huge nets that are dragged behind boats in order to catch shrimp Other animals like sea turtles are often caught inside these nets and soon die without sufficient oxygen To help reduce the | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The shrimping industry relies on trawls for its harvest. Trawls are huge nets that are
dragged behind boats in order to catch shrimp. Other animals, like sea turtles, are
often caught inside these nets and soon die without sufficient oxygen. To help
reduce the number of accidental deaths among sea turtles, engineers created a
Turtle Excluder Device (TED), that must now be installed in all shrimping trawls. This
one simple invention has greatly reduced the number of sea turtle deaths per year
for a number of reasons.
First, the TED was specifically designed to help sea turtles. The TED mechanism adds
a mechanical barrier in the middle of fishing nets that prevents any animal larger
than ten centimeters from getting caught deep inside. Once the animal hits this
metal grid, it tilts downward, providing that animal with a clear path to exit. Smaller
animals, like shrimp, pass through the metal guard and get caught in the end of the
trawl net, as usual.
Second, in order to make sure that fishermen use the Turtle Excluder Device, the
"Shrimp-Turtle Law" was passed. It states that all trawling shrimping boats must
have a TED installed. There are specific organizations in charge of monitoring
shrimping vessels to ensure that their TEDs are properly installed and maintained.
Finally, America now tightly controls the import of shrimp. All shrimp products must
come from only certified users of TEDs. Countries, companies, or fishermen who do
not comply with this law are not allowed to sell their products in the US and some
European countries. Since most shrimping businesses want to import their goods to
as many locations as possible, they have decided to comply and install TEDs in their
trawls.
Integrated Writing Transcript
There's no doubt that Turtle Excluder Devices are a great idea that must be used by every single shrimping
boat. However, they are far from perfect and in need of drastic improvement, regardless of what the
author in the reading may believe.
First of all, TEDs are metal barriers that, in theory, don't allow anything more than 10 centimeters to pass
through them. However, many small and mid-sized turtles are still constantly caught deep in the nets of
trawls. Species like the leatherback and loggerhead turtles are smaller and unable to use the metal
barriers to their advantage.
It's also important to keep in mind that TEDs don't only exclude turtles, but there are instances where
some lucky shrimp hit the metal barrier and escape the trawl. In order to reduce shrimp loss, and, more
importantly, their profits, many boat owners prefer not to use the device at all. When it comes time to
drop the trawl in the open sea, shrimpers will simply remove the TED. And it's almost impossible for any
organization to monitor these ships so far from shore.
And, finally, it should be noted that many vessels that claim to be certified TED trawl users and have
documents that claim that they comply with the rules of the Shrimp-Turtle Law, actually have fake
documents. You see, shrimping is an international business and the documentation to be considered
TED-certified changes based on the country of the boat in question. With so much difference between
countries, few people know when a vessel is holding a fake certification or a real one.

The article introduced the topic of the TED (turtle excluder device). More specifically, the writer discusses how this device can reduce the number of incidental deaths of sea turtles. The lecturer in the listening passage disagrees. He believes that it is not a perfect solution and needs improvement. Also, he attacks each of the claims made in the reading.

In the reading, the author states that TED was specially invented to help sea turtles. Moreover, this device caught large animal, and the animal hit the metal grid. This provide clean path to the exit. The lecturer, however, disagrees. He believes that small and middle-size animals get caught in net of trawls. Also, they are unable to use the metal grid.

The writer also claims that this device in order “shrimp turtle law”. It is mandatory to install the device in each fishing boat. Again, the lecturer believes there are flaws in the author’s argument. The speaker holds that many people do not use the device. They remove a device in the open sea; we cannot possible to monitor these ships.

Another reason why the author feels that shrimp products must come from TED certified users in the U.S. and some European countries. The lecture points out that some people make claims about their documents, but they have fake documents. Only, few people are able to recognise fake documents.

To sum up, both the writer and lecturer hold different views about TEDs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turer hold different views about TEDs.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1216.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04564315353 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38033268944 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 145.348785872 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589211618257 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.3110571551 49.2860985944 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.8 110.228320801 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.05 21.698381199 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.35 7.06452816374 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106610554136 0.272083759551 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277212751223 0.0996497079465 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373424047873 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0509955332451 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385849155349 0.0443174109184 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.3589403974 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.12 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.7273730684 47% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turer hold different views about TEDs.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments