The shrimping industry relies on trawls for its harvest Trawls are huge nets that are dragged behind boats in order to catch shrimp Other animals like sea turtles are often caught inside these nets and soon die without sufficient oxygen To help reduce the | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The shrimping industry relies on trawls for its harvest. Trawls are huge nets that are
dragged behind boats in order to catch shrimp. Other animals, like sea turtles, are
often caught inside these nets and soon die without sufficient oxygen. To help
reduce the number of accidental deaths among sea turtles, engineers created a
Turtle Excluder Device (TED), that must now be installed in all shrimping trawls. This
one simple invention has greatly reduced the number of sea turtle deaths per year
for a number of reasons.
First, the TED was specifically designed to help sea turtles. The TED mechanism adds
a mechanical barrier in the middle of fishing nets that prevents any animal larger
than ten centimeters from getting caught deep inside. Once the animal hits this
metal grid, it tilts downward, providing that animal with a clear path to exit. Smaller
animals, like shrimp, pass through the metal guard and get caught in the end of the
trawl net, as usual.
Second, in order to make sure that fishermen use the Turtle Excluder Device, the
"Shrimp-Turtle Law" was passed. It states that all trawling shrimping boats must
have a TED installed. There are specific organizations in charge of monitoring
shrimping vessels to ensure that their TEDs are properly installed and maintained.
Finally, America now tightly controls the import of shrimp. All shrimp products must
come from only certified users of TEDs. Countries, companies, or fishermen who do
not comply with this law are not allowed to sell their products in the US and some
European countries. Since most shrimping businesses want to import their goods to
as many locations as possible, they have decided to comply and install TEDs in their
trawls

The reading and the lecture are about the pros and cons of the Turtle Excluder Device (TED). The writer
believes there are many benefits to the use of TEDs, and that it has decreased the number of sea turtles
caught in trawls by shrimpers. The speaker in the listening passage disagrees. He claims there are still
many issues with TEDs and challenges each of the writer’s points.
First, the article posits that the design of the TED includes a metal barrier inside the net that prevents
larger animals from getting caught. Additionally, it says that the TED also provides a path for the sea
turtles to exit. However, the professor points out that small and mid-sized turtles still get caught deeper in
the trawls. He states this is because the metal barrier only prevents creatures larger than ten centimeters
to pass through it.
Also, the author notes that laws have been passed requiring shrimp boats to have a TED and use it
properly. The lecturer rebuts this argument. He says that it is impossible for organizations to regulate the
fishermen while they are fishing for shrimp and that they can just remove the TED right before putting the
nets into the ocean. Furthermore, he argues that they are inclined to do this because sometimes a TED
can also prevent shrimp from passing into the depths of the trawls, which decreases their profits.
Another reason the writer feels that TEDs are beneficial is that under import regulations, the shrimp sold
in the US can only come from suppliers who are certified TED users. Again, the speaker holds there are
flaws in this argument. He suggests that there are many boat owners who claim to be TED-certified, but, in
reality, have fake documentation. The lack of consistency in TED certification from country to country
allows many to deceive ports and sell their shrimp anyway.
To sum up, both the author and the lecturer hold conflicting views about TED.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...turtles caught in trawls by shrimpers. The speaker in the listening passage disagr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 30.3222958057 132% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 326.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95705521472 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48742556366 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542944785276 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4833470648 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0588235294 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 7.06452816374 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.09492273731 464% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136544298109 0.272083759551 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426486857211 0.0996497079465 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041205641055 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0421209343717 0.162205337803 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314457228372 0.0443174109184 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments