Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words.
Do not use memorized examples.
Some people believe that old people enjoy their life more than young people by contending that old people have more free time and financial resources. However, in my opinion, young people enjoy their life to the fullest and I will justify my remark in following paragraph.
First of all, it is a universal truth that with age comes illness and fatigue. Even though some old people are young in their heart, their body are not in the optimal state to enjoy their life. They have to constantly take care of their body and in doing so the essence of living is lost. Drawing from my experience, my grandfather who is a former athlete still desires to run in marathon that he did till last year. However, this year he couldn't as his body couldn't endure more. On the other hand, in most of the cases of youth, health issues don't deprive them from enjoying their life.
Another reason why I believe young people enjoy their life is because they are filled with enthusiasm and energy. Compared to old people, youth have more unfulfilled desires and in pursuing those desires they find enjoyment. Youth filled with energy are eager to involve in activities leading to gratification and delight. It can be any recreational activities as hiking, sports, bungee or even their work. I must admit that my opinion is based on my personal experience. Although my financial resource is limited, I have never allowed it to deprive me from enjoying my life. Last year I couldn't arrange sufficient fund to travel Goa with my friends. Nevertheless, I was filled with desire to invest my energy in a constructive and satisfying way so, I went for hike at Narayanthan. Thus, this energy and enthusiasm drives youth toward enjoying life.
To sum up, I firmly believe youth enjoy their life more than old people as they have optimum health and enthusiasm to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7476635514 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49255838712 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526479750779 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.7576525144 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175287364946 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595771519539 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602558683915 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1416365245 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541424642753 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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