Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people enjoy life more than older people do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Young lives are the future of this world. They will shape and mould the future. A nation having more youth has much importance than a nation having more of the older people. The reason behind this is really simple more youth means more capable hands, more opportunities for a nation to grow as a whole. So more the youth the merrier, the nation. I personally think that young people are able to enjoy their more than the older people. The reason behind it is obvious, they are more lively as they are young. They tend to have much less responsibilities and so they enjoy their life to the fullest. A college teenager tend have more parties than an average old person because the teenager has more time to do such stuff and enjoy the life.
Another important factor which affects the enjoyment of life is the health aspect. A teenager wont be hesitant to do weird and dangerous stuff as he probably wont have any health issues, on the other hand an average old person would prefer to sit at home watching television, or lying in his bed doing nothing. A old person wont probably even try to go out of his house to take a stroll as his legs might hurt or he/she has some other health issues. So the health aspect also make a great difference in enjoying lives.
A average young man in his prime tends to have more money than average old man as the young man is working and earning money. This young man is expected to spend his money more on living a luxurious life than an average old man, as the old people worry more about their future and this worrying makes them spend less on the enjoyment in their life. An average old person is more likely to save money for his retirement plan and the possible hospital expenses that he may face in old age. On the other hand their are no such constraints holding a young prime man from limiting his enjoyment in the life.
So, to summarize it all in a statement, I do think that young people enjoy their life more than older people do. Because they simply have no such factors limiting them from having fun as the older people have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y their life more than older people do. Because they simply have no such factors limiti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, really, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4921875 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17563591987 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9437254026 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7894736842 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31578947368 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198978115915 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770570181533 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834164090897 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147503616033 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757663458646 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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