The most ideal path for a society to set up its youngsters for positions of authority in government, industry, or different fields is by imparting in them a feeling of collaboration, not rivalry."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I partially agree with the statement that says the most ideal path for a society to set up its younsters for positions of authority in govenrment, industry, or different fields is by imparting in them the feeling of collaboration, not rivalry.
A sinlge person (he/she) cannot acheive the heights of being successful unless he/she is not being helped by others, so collaboration is also a important factor in getting success. A successful person always acknowledges the help and efforts of others. The best example of this is the Prime minister or President of a democratic country. He/She takes every important decision by consulting to his/her fellow ministers and then announce it to the publice. By doing so, he/she gets to know different aspects that may get missed.
Collaboration is a important factor while doing a task. If more and more people help and give efforts to your cause it is expected that the task which is to be performed will finish in less time and effort, giving the group a edge over the others. The best example of this is a pack of wolves hunting for their prey. They hunt their prey in group, by surrounding the prey on all sides giving them no route of escape. While a single cheetah need more effort and time to hunt the same prey. Hence collaboration is needed while working and a wise man always seeks collaboration.
Although rivalry is considered as a bad thing, but it is also having some pros. If a person finds himself a rival, it is expected of him to be more competative. So as a result of this competative nature that person will work harder than usual and try to beat the rival, while doing so he is also making his own growth making that youngster (person) more set to success. It is human tendacy to work even harder when we have to beat someone.
So as per the above points i think both of the aspects collaboration and rivalry are a important foctors for youngsters to acheive success. But collaborating others is a good habit which will help more getting towards success. So i partially agree with the given statemen
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, while, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68956043956 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68352880225 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519230769231 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.2565910885 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8421052632 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168475918514 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471816051808 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090818722944 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127962813671 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145151736229 0.0667264976115 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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