The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities As a result the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries Do you think this | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

Some people argue that campus libraries should be modernized with computers having applications that will help students and faculty locate a wide array of books catering to their interests, easily and that’s why university should allocate more funds to library. They cite the reason that students cannot find books easily to support their argument. However, I contend that it is a good idea to spend money on providing facilities to improve the sports and athletics department of the university. I will support my argument using the following two reasons.

First of all, improving sports and athletics facilities will provide the athletes with better quality equipment which in turn will help them master their skills. For instance, when I was in school in eighth grade, a new badminton court was installed near our school premises. I started playing there every day and found that I liked playing badminton and was naturally skilled at it. My sports coach in school, recognizing my talent, helped me train better and I was able to win a state-level badminton competition. It is because I trained and mastered my skills on the school badminton court, that I could win that competition.

Secondly, having better sports facilities will encourage students to participate in sports more and they will become healthier, mentally as well as physically. It is easy to get swamped in studies and not look after our own health. For example, one of my friends who was a Ph.D. candidate at university would always be working in the lab day and night to complete his thesis. In the third year of his degree, one day, he collapsed while in the laboratory. He was rushed to the hospital and was diagnosed with acute depression and had become physically weak. This incident was a wake-up call for him after which he started working out religiously using the university sports facilities. This example illustrates the importance of having sports and athletics facilities for students.

In conclusion, the issue of whether allocating more funds to the sports department than the campus library is a good decision is a complex one. Some might argue that the percentage of students who use the sports facilities is less compared to the number of students who use the campus library on a daily basis. Nevertheless, I still contend that it is a good idea to allocate more funds to the sports and athletics facilities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...of whether allocating more funds to the sports department than the campus library is a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, third, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.025 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75316181871 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3833713964 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.789473684 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246733165238 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737604847754 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672989609152 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153068842441 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565242642228 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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