Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer:
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
Some people argue that movies, television and other media have significant drawbacks on how young people behave. They cite violence and overly sexual nature of these media to support their point. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that movies and television provide far more advantages for young people. I will support my viewpoint with two reasons.
First of all, movies and television positively impact the actions of young children because many of these films deliver positive messages to the audience. For example, it is common now for television shows to demonstrate that bullying is not the correct course of action for children at school. In the past, before these media were available, children would not have been able to learn about the negative effects of bullying and other bad behaviors and thus they participated in them more frequently. It is important for children to be exposed to these positive messages because they able to be influenced at such a young age. Their brains are still developing and it is important that they see positive reinforcement of behaviors as often as possible. Thus, media and tv have actually been beneficial for children.
Secondly, movies and television play an important part in shaping the younger generation by inspiring them. For instance, now a days, there has been an increase in the premiering of films and tv shows based on real life stories of people. Biopics of artists, athletes, war heroes and scientists stimulate young minds and motivate them to follow in the protagonists’ footsteps. Previously, films and television shows depicting violence did not inspire children to better their lives or achieve their goals. It is of paramount importance that young minds be exposed to motivational films and tv shows to help shape a brighter future for themselves and the nation. Hence, this is another reason how movies and television have shaped young people’s minds for the better.
In conclusion, the issue of whether should be able to watch significant amounts of television and movies is complex. Some have suggested that their viewing times be reduced because the media negatively affects their behavior. Nevertheless, I still contend that tv and movies are advantageous for children and that they have wholly encouraging effect on their behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24533333333 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74563087266 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506666666667 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1252378154 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.526315789 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205748175828 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709503516647 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545619179492 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137497888844 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440393129991 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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