TPO 52Do you agree or disagree?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
since the dawn of humanity, there was lots of controvercial debates about whether society makes lots of hard rules for young people or not. In this line of thought, some people are of the opinion that people our expects form youth are too much while I pesonally sunscribe to the view that the rules in today's modern life is not too stirct for young people. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, there is no secret to the fact that young people become too rebel. it shold be policies to control them. generally speaking, thanks to technological breakthroughs, in today's modern life, people access to a wide range of information, which is not really good information; it means that sometime people specifically young people find data in advanced technologis such as internet, or social media, that have violent contents. As a case in point, some young people who tend to be innovative, might find information about hacking other's banck account in the internet. therefore, the thechnology, sometimes, has negative influence on youth. hence, the governmet should diprive them by the strict rules to have contol on them.
Another reason is that young individuals, in today's world, not lead by strong beliefs, which light the way for them. it means that in comparison of the past, youths struggle with a variety of matters and there is no reliable source to pave the way for them. In fact, the more sophisticated world individuals face, the more demands for a leader seems neccessary. To be more specific, young people have lost the right way since the life has altered dramatically. Thus, if a cociety prove specilal rules, young people might get a presues path to follow. therefore, the rules is not really harsh to follow.
Drawing upon the reasons that I metioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from a general rule, I am of the opinion that the rules, in the today's world, is not too difficult for young people. Not only do they become too rebel, which governments should restrict them, but also with these rules youth find a capable way to follow and foster.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8825136612 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6061578207 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543715846995 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6228601219 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.117647059 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27359004975 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849890646952 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627039314616 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177698839405 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459371041763 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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