A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
۱٫ Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
۲٫ Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
In my opinion, online courses in teaching effectively for high school teachers would be a better idea, because using online courses would lead to more efficiency and moreover it would easier for the teachers to do the course whenever they can. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, Online courses would have more efficiency because by this method we could train all of our high school teachers through one single course. On the contrary, by implementing the other plan, we should put on a lot of physical classes to train all the teachers. As a result, we can train all teachers with less money and less time through online courses. For example, I remember when I was a student some of our teachers were invited to an additional training course in the middle of the semester. Indeed, they left the school for a period of one week and when they came back they were so busy for teaching other teachers about what they were learned. Therefore, it wasn’t efficient at all. Indeed, they spent too much money and time to train all the teachers at the school, in which if they saved the money, they could improve the school library. Besides, in the meantime, they haven’t enough concentration when they were teaching the students.
Second, by using online courses teachers could learn the content easier because, in online courses, sources are available whenever you want. Thereby, you can do it whenever you have time. Moreover, unlike physical courses, through online courses, you can study at home with a comfortable style without the need to dress formal. For example, last year I attended an online course for welding inspection. After registration, they sent me a lot of reference sources and the videos of class in which the professor lectured the contents. Indeed, it was totally fun for me because without any need to dress formal, I watched the videos when I wanted. Thereby, it helped me finish the course as well as I should. Additionally, there are a lot of important references on the CD they sent to me in which I couldn’t find anywhere else.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it would be better to train high school teachers through online courses instead of sending a small group of them to train and come back to teach others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 793, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...ll the teachers at the school, in which if they saved the money, they could improv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85933503836 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61586948017 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4760917667 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186659368417 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605998033392 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530715562002 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125919253929 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384765181525 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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