A company is planning to spend money on improving employees’ work, which way do you think is better?
1.spend money on enhancing employees’ efficiency in using technology.
2.spend money on redesigning the workplace to make it comfortable and providing more spacious conference room.
In contemporary society, a lot of companies have tried hard to improve their employees’ work ability. Some people believe that a better work environment can help employee to work better, whereas I argue that the key to enhance employees’ performance should be making improvement in efficiency of using technology.
To begin with, mastering technology can improve employee’s work ability. There are a lot of works which are simple but time-consuming. Employee can improve their work ability by leaving those works to computers; software in computer will calculate those simple problems with astonishing ability in calculation. Assisted by cutting-edge tech, employees can finish a plethora of work in an unprecedented speed. For instance, I am a student major in civil engineering. I have to draw many diagrams in a daily base to keep up with my instructor’s steeps. It usually takes me three hours to complete. But after I studied Auto Cade, a software helping people to create diagrams, I can finish my daily work in one hour.
On the other hand, improving ability in using technology can enhance employees’ motivation. Proficient in using up-to-date software or devices can ease employee’s pressure; that is, they can leave those chores requiring loads of meaning-less repeats to computer, thus, feeling happier and more satisfied about their job. A typical case is my mother. In the past, she had to work for 10 hours daily to complete complex calculations. Additionally, she had to work extra time near Chinese new-year, for finishing yearly assignments. On the contrary, my mother can finish her job in eight hours with the assistant of Excel and enjoy relaxing long break in Chinese new-year. It is proficient in tech that reduces my mother’s pressure as an employee.
Granted, improvement in condition can make employees excited. However, it can also be a severe disruption in their work. A better work environment may include entertainment such as television or game stations for employee to make fun during spare time. Though it may work well as a means for them to release themselves, it also works well as a potential temptation. It might as well to extent their relaxing time as set up those surrounding improvement or conference room.
In light of all above statements, I argue that improve employees’ proficiency in using tech can be key to improve their performance, because of it has several advantages outcompeting improvement in environment, such as enhancement in efficiency; easing pressure in work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In contemporary society, a lot of compan...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt in efficiency of using technology. To begin with, mastering technology ca...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 726, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I can finish my daily work in one hour. On the other hand, improving ability i...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mother's pressure as an employee. Granted, improvement in condition can ...
^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unding improvement or conference room. In light of all above statements, I ar...
^^^^
Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in efficiency; easing pressure in work.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32923832924 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30142877121 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.625941031 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3043478261 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221236600399 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748756825089 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732320351713 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160936460288 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747248721193 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.