Do you agree or disagree: after high school, graduates should take at least one year off to work or travel before entering university.
It is no doubt that work or travel could afford students with different knowledge from textbooks and school education. To adapt to society full of changes and competition rapidly, graduates should acquire diverse knowledge and hacks as much as possible. Whether for students studying social sciences or humanities in the university , or for graduates learning engineering or sciences in college, work or travel could go a long way. This is the same for the graduates who will major in fine or performing arts in the university. Obiviouly, I will support the statement above.
To begin with, work possesses advantages for students going for science or engineering major. We all know that technology development is charged with motivation and progress at a high pace. If graduates hope to hunt for great jobs in this areas, they should keep themselves contacting the most original technology advancement, which could be fulfilled by work or internship. At the same time, graduates of science major rely on creative ideas and inspiration to a large extent. In other words, they should cultivate their original ability which means more diverse and original thoughts’ input. This task chould also be realized by work. Internship before entering university could lay a solid foundation for following professional knowledge learning.
Secondly, travel could produce lots of positive outcomes for students of fine or performing arts. By traveling they could consort all sorts of friends ,contact all kinds of values and explore more cultures, which could expand their outlook and motivate the generation of creative inspiration. Meanwhile, students who will major in performing arts could observe and recognize more types of humans during travel. These experience could benefit them when it comes to performing specific roles. Besides, travel could release the graduates’ pressure and give them a chance to take a rest after a long time of studying.
All in all, graudates could travel or work, recognizing the world in a different approach.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, no doubt, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41744548287 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87314751794 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576323987539 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2688495852 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6111111111 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168081433262 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545498474244 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324193037143 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10295067076 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304540240363 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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