do you agree or disagree children should be given cell phones
Technology is essential to our progress and well-being in the contemporary era. Modern innovations are a service that is especially vital to the prosperity of us. Therefore, I agree that children should be given cell phones because that will save their money and reduce their parents’ worries.
First, the cell phone today has several advantages and many uses. In fact, people today can depend on their phones to do multitasks. For instance, they use it to capture photos in order to save their nice moments, searching for different information through the internet and playing games. On the other hand, if children not allow to use cell phones, they will waste their money by buying many devices. Thus, it is more practical and economical for the parents to give cell phones to their children.
Another point why I advocate that, it is a well-established fact that the life today is very hard and parents spend many hours at their jobs. When the child has his phone with him, that will have great impact on the parents’ life because they can always cheek after their children to. Consequently, that will make parent feel less stressful and enhance their performance. In contrast, parent will not be able to know if their child has a treble and need help, if he cannot reach or contact them. So, they will minimize their convenience in their life.
To sum up, cell phoned is the single greatest determinants of child’s safety and prosperity hopefully, more parents will recognize its significance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 332, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...n the other hand, if children not allow to use cell phones, they will waste their mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in contrast, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1977.66487455 64% => OK
No of words: 253.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03162055336 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74311717581 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596837944664 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2863095186 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9285714286 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20381481513 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787727259727 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090054297597 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143668497855 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905641102675 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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