Although educators have been putting a lot of effort in improving the quality of education, there are still debates on whether the goal of education lies in helping students to educate themselves. In my point of view, I strongly disagree with this opinion.
Have you ever heard your teacher said the goal of education is to help people to educate themselves? On the surface, the idea sounds extremely convincing. However, it is just an excuse made by some of the teachers who can’t deliver knowledge and skills effectively. Many educators don’t have passion in teaching young individuals, and they use this notion as a way to stay lazy. For example, some math teachers never impart knowledge in class, but ask students to read the textbooks and learn addition by themselves. As a result, students end up with poor academic performance. In fact, teachers who apply this teaching method never feel they are responsible for student’s test scores because they can use their educational belief is a great excuse.
Nowadays the world has been changing dramatically, it is barely possible to learn new knowledge without other’s assistance. Therefore, the goal of education is not about educating oneself, but about gaining knowledge efficiently in order to keep up with the drastically changing world. For example, more and more computer software are developed nowadays, young individuals are required to learn new computer skills, which can’t be done on their own. As a result, the goal of education lies in imparting new skills effectively rather than help students to educate themselves.
Finally, in addition to gaining skills and knowledge, developing emotional well-being also plays an important role in educating students. The most important goal of education is to help students build up empathy for people, express their opinions and feeling, and offer love and care for those who are suffering. Guidance from adults or educators is important for cultivating young individuals to have confidence and self-esteem. In fact, psychological success is far more important than educating oneself.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that helping people to educate themselves is just a lie. The goal of education lies in keeping up with the cutting-edge technology and developing confident individuals not educating themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43324250681 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99890716037 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528610354223 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8628541977 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.947368421 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380784441948 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127560411162 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110465140155 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246152969195 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644697964167 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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