Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For psychologists and social scientists, the influence of celebrities has always been a fascinating topic. Personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that celebrities influence the younger generation more than the elderly. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the older generation like to gather information from celebrities. This is probably because the older society is more hierarchy-based than today. Obedience plays an important part on a hierarchy-based structure. As a result, the elderly are easily affected by well-known people, especially celebrities on TV. An experience of my grandparents is a compelling example of this. My grandparents have been following a political TV program called “Gondola's Show” for many years. The host of the show is called Celest Chen, who likes to provide some biased opinions and misleading facts. She proposed many fake news about the ruling party, which will definitely not be accepted by the younger generation, however, her words are always valued by my grandparents. The situation gets worse when it comes to voting, where older people cast their votes according to opinions from celebrities rather than making decisions by themselves. What we can see from the example is that the celebrities affected the elderly more than the young.
Secondly, younger people are often better educated and most of them received higher education. As a result, they are more likely to make wiser judgment based on their profound knowledge. For example, female celebrities like to recommend cosmetics they prefer. Although their recommendation looks convincing, I would not blindly take these suggestions. It is obvious that younger people are less affected by celebrities. In contrast, older people in my family are easily influenced by the advertisement made by celebrities. They enjoy watching advertisements on TV and bought a lot of unnecessary products such as cosmetics or medical products. These products look amazing from the surface; however, most of them are vulnerable and flawed. These interesting phenomena show that celebrities influence the elderly more than the young.
Last but not least, as an old Taiwanese saying goes, old dogs refuse to learn new knowledge, which means older people are stubborn and are unwilling to change. Usually, older people choose to trust celebrities because they don’t prefer finding resources by themselves. The older generation have limited computer skills and virtually have no access to the internet. Lack of dedicated online searching tools makes them unable to gather information or resources from a different perspective. Hence, have to trust celebrities no matter what the truth is.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities influence the older generation more than the young. This is because the elderly like to trust the opinions of celebrities and because they are not as well educated as younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46767241379 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02902869964 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519396551724 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.382431638 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.4827586207 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13793103448 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207468868938 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565184129006 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466535560957 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123357616012 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315062867227 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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