Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with the development of technology, it is easy to quickly read about international news. Personally, I strongly agree with the opinion that knowing international events plays a crucial part in life. I feel this way with two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, knowing international news is beneficial for a new career. Job search consultants suggest that learning job-hunting skills from foreign countries can help get a new job more quickly. My personal experience is a compelling success of this. A few months ago, my company was suffering from some financial issues, so I decided to apply for a new job. It has always been stressful while searching for a new job. I was disappointed at the beginning because my resume was rejected by several recruiters. Luckily, since I maintain a habit of reading internal news everyday, I read a news about inspiring resumes design. Consequently, I came up with an idea that I can use my computer skills to make a stunning, eye-catching resume. A few days later, a recruiter in an international company contacted me and planed an interview. The interview process went on smoothly and I was accepted by the company. If it had not been for the innovative ideas from foreign employees, I wouldn’t have found a new job within a few weeks.
Secondly, knowing about the events happening in other parts of the world ensures one’s safety. Especially for those who go abroad frequently, it is crucial to know the local circumstances of the country you are visiting. For instance, a few years ago, my brother was planning on a business trip to Thailand. Since he doesn’t read about international news quite often, he had no idea what was happening at the time. It wasn’t until a friend of his told him did he realize there were some protests against Chinese people. Thus, he rescheduled his business trip to one month later. In my opinion, if it had not been for the news from his friend, he could definitely be in danger. To some extent, the international news saved his life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe knowing international news plays an important role in our life. This is because it helps us to get a better job and it avoids us from danger.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...intain a habit of reading internal news everyday, I read a news about inspiring resumes ...
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Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
... reading internal news everyday, I read a news about inspiring resumes design. Consequ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve found a new job within a few weeks. Secondly, knowing about the events happe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87564766839 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98819569952 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556994818653 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.7911488148 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.4166666667 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0833333333 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994162874997 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0321018275609 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458265085998 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080355196358 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531659259136 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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