Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For psychologists and social scientists, the influence of celebrities is always a fascinating topic. Personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that celebrities influence the younger generation more than the elderly. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the older generation like to gather information from celebrities. This is probably because the older society is more hierarchy-based than today. Obedience is the most important part of a hierarchy-based structure. Therefore, the elderly are easily affected by well-known people, especially celebrities on TV. An experience of my grandparents is a compelling example of this. They have been following a political TV program called “Gondola's Show” for many years. The host of the show is called Celest Chen, who always provides biased opinions and misleading facts. Her opinions will definitely not be accepted by the younger generation. However, her words are always valued by my grandparents. The situation gets worse when it comes to voting, where older people trust celebrities rather than making decisions by themselves.
Secondly, younger people are often better educated and most of them received higher education. As a result, they are more likely to make wiser judgment based on their profound knowledge. For example, female celebrities like to recommend cosmetics they prefer. Although their recommendation looks convincing, I would not blindly take these suggestions. It is obvious that younger people are less affected by celebrities because they try to gather more accurate information before buying a product. In contrast, older people in my family are easily influenced by the advertisement made by celebrities. They enjoy watching advertisements on TV and bought a lot of unnecessary products such as cosmetics or medical products. These products look amazing from the surface; however, most of them are vulnerable and flawed. These interesting phenomena show that celebrities influence the elderly more than the young.
Last but not least, as an old Taiwanese saying goes, old dogs refuse to learn new knowledge, which means older people are stubborn and are unwilling to change. Usually, older people choose to trust celebrities because they don’t prefer finding resources by themselves. The older generation have limited computer skills and virtually have no access to the internet. Lack of dedicated online searching tools makes them unable to gather information or resources from a different perspective. Hence, have to trust celebrities no matter what the truth is.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities influence the older generation more than the young. This is because the elderly like to trust the opinions of celebrities and because they are not as well educated as younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54214123007 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05893121959 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523917995444 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.579797975 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.8965517241 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1379310345 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51724137931 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209094788373 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546167552944 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446237014181 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125417750889 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330988854766 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.26 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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