For psychologists and social scientists, the influence of celebrities is always a fascinating topic. Personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that celebrities influence the younger generation more than the elderly. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the older generation like gather information from celebrities. This is probably because the older society is more hierarchy-based than today. Obedience is the most important part of a hierarchy-based structure. Therefore, the elderly are easily affected by well-known people, especially celebrities on TV. An experience of my grandparents is a compelling example of this. They have been following a political TV program called “Gondola's Show” for many years. The host of the show is called Celest Chen, who always provides biased opinions and misleading facts. Her opinions will definitely not be accepted by the younger generation. However, her words are always valued by my grandparents. The situation gets worse when it comes to voting because the older generation are easily influenced by the opinions of these celebrities. Thus, they always chose to trust celebrities rather than making decisions by themselves.
Secondly, younger people are often better educated since most of them received higher education. As a result, they are more likely to make wiser judgment based on their profound knowledge. For example, female celebrities like to recommend cosmetics they prefer. Although their recommendation looks convincing, I would not blindly take these suggestions. It is obvious that younger people are less affected by celebrities. In contrast, older people in my family are easily influenced by the advertisement made by celebrities. They enjoy watching advertisements on TV and bought a lot of unnecessary products such as cosmetics or medical products. These products look amazing from the surface; however, most of them are vulnerable and flawed. These interesting phenomena show that celebrities influence the elderly more than the young.
Last but not least, as an old Taiwanese saying goes, old dogs refuse to learn new knowledge, which means older people are stubborn and are unwilling to change. Usually, older people choose to trust celebrities because they don’t prefer finding resources by themselves. The older generation have limited computer skills and virtually have no access to the internet. Lack of dedicated online searching tools makes them unable to gather information or resources from a different perspective. Hence, have to trust celebrities no matter what the truth is.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities influence the older generation more than the young. This is because the elderly like to trust the opinions of celebrities and because they are not as well educated as younger people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54875283447 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07141162108 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514739229025 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6349317748 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5666666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2130475165 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560429818162 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456239675136 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126507793044 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339544260336 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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