Education is among the most prominent aspects of everyone’s life that people can seek their enthusiasms and favors in it and follow it. Both elementary schools and universities need great attention and sufficient budget to achieve their educational intentions. In this context, there is a heated controversy as to which group a government should invest in more. Although some people may support spending more money on colleges, I believe that children are the most important resource for future growth which will guarantee the prosperous development of a country. This essay will demonstrate two reasons for this assertion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the government would capable to detect, identify and develop the most outstanding talents of each child optimally by funding young kids’ education. It is the awful truth that some people don’t feel job and life satisfaction just because there was no talent scout during their childhood to change their life path. For example, when I went to school, the government disbursed a major portion of educational funds to expand universities’ facilities and development while we had to study a bunch of tough and obscure books without any attention to our other aspects of life. Whenever we asked the headmaster to provide sports equipment for school he responded that “we don’t have adequate financial resources”. In this way, not only nobody identified our capacities but also we didn’t enjoy our childhood. So if government plans for children in a way that their talents flourish in a good way, they will become great citizens in the future in such a developed society.
Another equally significant point is that basic education plays an incontrovertible role in future education. An old Chinese proverb says that “Give a man a fish and he will eat a day. Teach a man to fish and he will eat for a lifetime”. In fact, if basic education gets enforced properly it would be able to decrease educating cost in other grades. For instance, when Japan was in developing era, its top government officials noticed that they had been spending noticeable capital to keep their employees up to date. So they scrutinized underway educating system and eventually decided to modify its rudimentary level because children were the members of Japan’s society to come. Since then Japanese teachers have been teaching the children how to learn instead of traditional teaching methods. In this way, the children would be able to upgrade themselves easily and become multi-task learning students that helped them to achieve great prosperity and success. Therefore the Japanese government has constructed contemporary Japan with the cooperation of this trained generation that everyone in all the world touches their cab and admires them whenever they see the fruit of Japanese’s efforts.
To recapitulate, a perfect society in the future is the one that can be achieved by today’s children. Because their flourished flairs and correct elementary education will guarantee the development and successful achievements of the country. Consequently, they should receive considerable attention on the part of the government. Equipping universities with new facilities can be useful only if competent educated students are available.
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2821.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43545279383 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11142824766 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558766859345 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 882.9 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6797927504 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.541666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266153320902 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737762705552 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423898267695 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172821259965 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226624960482 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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