Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
Upon the question should all students be required to study art and music in secondary school, different people have different opinions based on their emotion, education, culture, etc. From my point of view, teaching art and music in schools have numerous advantages for students. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First and foremost, according to the latest researches which were published in well-known journals, playing musical instruments like piano or violin have positive effects on our minds. Results of experiments have shown that listening to music makes people feel happy and relaxed. Furthermore, it helps students memorize information and receiving new materials easily and in a more convenient way.
In the second place, painting nice pictures and playing instruments will increases students’ self-confidence. They will realize that they have the ability to create beautiful drawings and so forth. In addition, they can form new groups to practice painting or playing and in my opinion, students will learn how to cooperate with their classmates in these groups. Besides, if students study music in schools, they will be interested to participate in social events like concerts and it will enrich their cultural believes.
Last but not least, requiring students to study art and music is beneficial for their future. For example, some students have extraordinary ability to draw pictures so they can pursue this career and become successful artists in the future. Additionally, studying art in secondary schools will help them increase their knowledge and broaden their horizons. In my point of view, study music and other kinds of arts is a good entertainment for student and it will decrease academic pressures.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that studying art and music in schools has several advantages for students. It will increase their self-confidence, help them choose their majors in university or career and other advantages which I outlined above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, for example, in addition, in my opinion, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45171339564 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91639703199 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554517133956 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.176080898 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.375 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270672649648 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966894313158 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907071528802 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160952667591 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892111188956 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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