Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is an increasing debate on whether people could do things well when they have a wide variety of exposures to different things. Some people believe that they can not perform things well because they are busy doing so many different things. However, others do not agree with it and hold different opinions. From my point of view, I think people can still do things well even they are busy doing different things and I will explore my idea in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, having different kinds of exposures is good for mental health and can release pressures. It is tired if people keep focusing on specific tasks for a long time. People need to attend different activities to relax and get refreshed. Drawing from my own experience, I am a graduate student who is busy on my chemistry research. Everyday I spend a lot of time doing experiments in labs and reading research papers. Therefore, I like to go to swim during the lunch time and play basketball after finishing the lab experiments. In addition, I attend dance clubs during weekends and be a volunteer at a kindergarten on every Monday morning. Through attending these activities, I can forget the overwhelming pressure from my research and recharge myself during exercises and volunteering. I have found that after I participated in these activities, I become more focused on my research and am making progress on my experiments. For this reason, I think doing many different things can help me do things well.
Secondly, exploring different fields can broaden people' horizon so that it can enhance their work. Trying wide range of things help people to see things from different perspectives and build connections. Take my sister as example, she is a product manager in a tech company. She enjoys attending different kind of social activities such as wine tasting events and coffee chats, and traveling to different places when she has time. She thinks that by having tons of different exposures, she can know people better and become a good bridge between their colleagues. She also can have more connections and common topics to build the relationship with her colleagues. As a result, her career goes very smooth. She have obtained several promotions since she joined her company.
In lights of reasons above, I disagree with the statement that people do very few things well because they are busy doing so many things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ngs well because they are busy doing so many different things. However, others do not agree wi...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective, and the comma is missing. Did you mean 'every day, I'?
Suggestion: Every day, I
...t who is busy on my chemistry research. Everyday I spend a lot of time doing experiments i...
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Line 3, column 898, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
... become more focused on my research and am making progress on my experiments. For ...
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Line 3, column 967, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...riments. For this reason, I think doing many different things can help me do things well. ...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[5]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
...ng tons of different exposures, she can know people better and become a good bridge ...
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Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...a good bridge between their colleagues. She also can have more connections and comm...
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Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...esult, her career goes very smooth. She have obtained several promotions since she j...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...motions since she joined her company. In lights of reasons above, I disagree w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, i think, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95308641975 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71194302377 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523456790123 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5944887635 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2173913043 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6086956522 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400534218021 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124785305813 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165789506985 0.0737576698707 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.346786649056 0.150856017488 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.222282804799 0.0645574589148 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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