Who do you think most need and deserve financial help from the government?
1. young workers who recently lose jobs
2. young couple who have children
3. jobless people aged 70 or above
There is no shortage of opinion of which group of people deserves financial help from the government. In my view, I maintain that jobless people aged 70 or above need the assistance from the government. It is my firm belief that they requires the support from government and I will explore my ideas in the following paragraphs.
First of all, aged people usually have difficulties finding jobs. It is the fact that there is more demand for young people in the job market. Because their compensations are cheaper and they are easily to be trained. For example, my uncle who is fifty has been looking for jobs for several months without any luck. However, my sister who is a new graduate got a job within one month of her graduation. As a result, I believe aged people requires support from the government especially the people who is aged above seventy. Otherwise, they would have difficulties to make livings.
In addition, aged people have more expenses for health issues. When people become older, their body conditions usually become worse and they have to to visit doctors often. It takes a lot of money to afford medicines and pay the bills for the hospitals. Drawing from my grandfather’s example, he just turns to seventy this year and he easily get injures and feels pains from his body. Therefore, he has several appointments with doctors in a short time and it costs a lot of money that he can barely afford. It is obvious that aged people have higher living costs than other group of people. If jobless aged people do not obtain assistance from the government, they will have problems to live.
Although, some people argues that young workers who recently lose jobs or young couple who have children require financial help from the government as well, it is the fact that those young people can easily find jobs. Moreover, young generation should be trained to be strong and try to live by themselves. Hence, I still think that jobless people aged 70 deserves the assistance than other groups do.
In light of the reasons above, I strongly believe that jobless people aged seventh or above deserves the financial help from the government.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
...ernment. It is my firm belief that they requires the support from government and I will ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ions usually become worse and they have to to visit doctors often. It takes a lot of ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...urns to seventy this year and he easily get injures and feels pains from his body. ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83288409704 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5261975507 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498652291105 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3319133185 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.380952381 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448913075558 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122716131308 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119507834142 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26809199921 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14118478003 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'require'
Suggestion: require
...ernment. It is my firm belief that they requires the support from government and I will ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ions usually become worse and they have to to visit doctors often. It takes a lot of ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...urns to seventy this year and he easily get injures and feels pains from his body. ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83288409704 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5261975507 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498652291105 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3319133185 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.380952381 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448913075558 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122716131308 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119507834142 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26809199921 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14118478003 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.