Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers’ salaries.
Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is often argued that how countries can improve the quality of their education system. Personally, I believe that although increasing teachers’ salaries is an important way, there are some more crucial matters that countries should mainly focus on them instead. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, teachers are the last part of the educational chain. They transfer certain materials to students that are prepared by higher elements of the education system. If these materials are not chosen appropriately, teachers cannot educate the students properly, although, they are fully motivated to do their best. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. For instance, when I was studying in high school, there were several trivial courses that I had to study. Spending time on such absurd things was a significant negative point for my learning; however, my teachers were the best and it was not their fault. They had to teach us what they were asked. So, I think deciding to what materials would be included in courses is more important than teachers’ salaries.
In addition, teaching has changed over the time. It is not only about teachers, books and classrooms. Teachers should teach students using suitable equipment. They can not explain their ideas without convenient tools, no matter how much they want to put effort in teaching. For example, imagine a situation that a teacher wants to show an online video in the classroom; if there are not a stable internet connection or a good video projector, how he can do that? thus, in my opinion, if countries have decided to spend an amount of money on enhancing their education system, first, they should consider providing teaching facilities.
In conclusion, I believe that increasing teachers’ salaries is not the best option in order to improve education quality. Countries can pay attention to more momentous issues like educational contents and schools’ equipment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18461538462 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79542483354 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.289966223 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6842105263 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1052631579 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21228849014 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654611367195 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670960736591 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150605481995 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655244077056 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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