Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children nowadays have too much freedom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, children definitely have much more freedom then it was earlier. Modern generations tend to become more and more liberal, what particularly affects children`s education in families. However, it is not true that children have too much freedom now. I have two reasons why I think so.
First, if a child does not have sufficient freedom, it will badly affect him in several ways. Children who have prohibitions in families can go off the normal development track. They tend to become less self-confident and more depressed. For example, I had a friend whose parents stated a lot of restrictions. For example, he had to go home not earlier than 8 PM. This meant that whereas his friends were having fun with each other, he was compelled to spend time at home. As a result, he was becoming less and less socialized as time was coming, because teenagers usually walk and play in evenings, at least in Russia. Also, he wasn`t able to find a girlfriend as he literally couldn`t go to date with girls because of these strict prohibitions. As a result, he became a very depressed person, and his relationships with parents also became very bad.
Secondly, even when freedoms are very broad, it does not imply anything wrong if it assumes responsibilties. Of course, freedoms without responsibilities becomes anarchy. However, if parents educate their children with spirit of freedoms and responsibilties, it becomes very beneficial. For example, I have a friend who was allowed to do literally anything within reasonable bounds. A lot of parents give small money for children every day, but he was given relatively large amount of money but for month, and no additional money would have been given if he had spent it before the end of a month. He was sometimes allowed to have parties in their apartments, but after this he had to clean the apartments. In this way parents educated feeling of responsibility of him. As a result, he has become a very successfull person with a great career.
In conclusion, children have suitable level of freedom now. This is because lack of freedom may lead to bad development of personality, and because big freedoms are even better if they are along with big responsibilities.
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...ey are along with big responsibilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, at least, for example, i think, in conclusion, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97860962567 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04552379577 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540106951872 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3392513377 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9565217391 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2608695652 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170763212455 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621824732011 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623917561279 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130606766145 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054631611818 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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