Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Children sometimes prefer to follow attitudes from others like classmates or teachers more than their parents. This could bring a serious problem, however, this statement could be part of the way how parents educate their children. In my view, there is no influence impacting a group of kids whether these have good principles, in order to have good behavior. Although, in many cases, this theory, unfortunately, do not apply. A possible reason is the lack of principles and the attention, more of these kids are demanding on their parents.

First of all, kids sometimes have the necessity to enter in a specific new group of kids, with the same age frequently, with other classmates. There is always a leader in those groups. Someone who mostly create rules and give instructions to other kids in order to be an important boss or leader. As an example, we can state now, how many kids in school determinate who is more valuable and create some criteria, in the majority of the cases, bad to build a right way.

Second, the shape of parents to many kids would become conservative and incomprehensive to their ideas or decisions by the leaders. Additionally, these criteria could bring common problems, for the reason that these children can break the rules easily. On the other hand, if parents try to inspect or watch carefully the behavior of their kids, they could realize early what is happening, and also could prevent negative results.

Additionally, we are living a very difficult society, in the majority of the cases divided, and the best way to improve the harmony between the relationship from parents and kids is talking to them, in an effective way, in order to have good results.

Concluding these comments, I totally disagree with the loosing of respect from children to their parents, but even when it is not mentioned in this topic, I think this could be a result of the main idea described. We can imagine how long the current society is growing, and how is the behavior of most of the individuals who perform it, the best attitude that parents must have with their children is to build a strong communication and talk with them about everything that is happening outside, in order to create confidence between them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, i think, first of all, in many cases, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88743455497 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68954693741 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.192934771 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.466666667 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4666666667 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122276560887 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423585846322 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286040175364 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0642355865508 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346331141201 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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