Nowadays, the fundamental importance of healthy eating makes itself a permanent topic, and recently people have even begun to ponder how to educate juveniles to eat healthily. When this question is discussed, a general controversy arises. Some people advocate that schools are responsible to educate schoolchildren about healthy diets since parents cannot manage the problem alone. As far as I am concerned, I definitely concur with this assertion, and what I believe can be substantiated as follows.
In the first place, teachers can educate students about healthy eating more efficiently and thoroughly. With the assistance of educational facilities and diversified learning materials, such as slide shows and tactfully-designed videos, students are enabled to grasp a more comprehensive understanding of the underlying mechanisms of healthy eating. Besides, teachers who are equipped with professional knowledge and skills, such as biology and chemistry, are capable of illustrating the knowledge vividly and visualizing abstract concepts in an understandable way. Therefore, after possessing the basic knowledge about the potential disadvantages of some food, schoolchildren are more willing to accept teachers’ suggestions and reshape their eating habits. For example, my sister used to have a sweet tooth and eat a lot of candies and chocolate with high calories. Although my parents told her the serious outcomes, she still ignored their warnings. One day, her biology teacher introduced diabetes and obesity caused by too much intake of sugar in class, and meticulously demonstrate the cause and formation process. At that moment, she really realized the cruel consequences and stopped eating too much sugar every day.
In addition, in school, students are granted more chances to foster healthy eating habits with the guidance of teachers. Most schoolchildren have their lunches in schools, and it is a blessed opportunity for teachers to instruct their students. Since teachers are the authority in school, many students view them as role models and are glad to follow their instructions. Thus, during lunchtime, under the surveillance of teachers, children are prone to reduce the intake of unhealthy food and reshape their eating lifestyle. While at home, children may be spoiled by their parents and grandparents, causing serious chronic illnesses in the digestive system at a young age. It is investigated that under the guidance of teachers, it is more likely for children to cultivate some healthy eating habits and give up those detrimental ones. More than 60 percent of students believe teachers play a more critical role in fostering healthy habits than parents. The main reason for the conclusion is the strict rules set by their teachers and the effects of role modeling.
Admittedly, some people maintain that teachers should pay more attention to students' academic performance instead of their lives. And this proposal also imposes too much extra pressure and workload on teachers. However, it does not cost too much time and the merits outweigh the deficiencies. Besides, teachers can educate their students in accordance with their characteristics, facilitating the cultivation of conducive habits.
In a nutshell, it is advisable that schools take the responsibility to educate students on healthy eating. Every single day spent in school ought to be made full use of, and teachers and schools should play a critical role in assisting students to live healthier lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an understandable way" with adverb for "understandable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2973.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52602230483 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04137217742 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529739776952 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 914.4 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9440490945 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.346153846 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306832449221 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812770622484 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621450321119 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178933622389 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379637040573 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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