Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that famous people have not enough security and privacy, it leads to they cannot have an ordinary living condition like other citizens in society. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that the source of lack of security and difficulty of famous people are mainly themselves. They try to attract people attention by sharing some personal information on their facebook page or public networks, in order to increase their followers. However, I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
First and foremost, they have this right to have a happy and natural personal life and family relationship similar to other people. For example, last month, when my friend and I had dinner at a restaurant, we saw a well-known football player and his wife there. Nonetheless, all of the people in the restaurant want to take a photograph with him or have his signature. It led to his wife became so angry and left the restaurant. Maybe all other women feel like her in the same situation.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that famous people are not free from mistakes. All of us maybe have some unfortunate moments or did some small illegally works. For example, fast driving or dismiss a red light during driving, but our image was not shared on the internet website news or in social networks. People character, personality and their calm should not be threatened by over public attention.
Finally, yet importantly, children of popular characters suffer from the fame of their parents. For instance, the daughter of a famous singer exposes to mocking by other students in school if the last song of her father was not enough interesting. The problem would be more serious when we know that some of their children try to make hidden they are relevant to knell-known people, because they do not want to be subject of suffering and over attention by other students.
On the basis of the reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that famous people deserve to have better privacy than they have now. Because they need to have a healthy and happy family relationship similar to others, and they have the right to make mistakes, and their children should live and rise similar to all other children in society.
- TPO 49 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 63
- In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 76
- Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- one of the best ways that parents can help their children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...player and his wife there. Nonetheless, all of the people in the restaurant want to take a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, well, for example, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91358024691 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59085656162 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530864197531 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.357449581 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.555555556 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25842292964 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838589563003 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12499122758 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148045061701 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103667342225 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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