Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue the importance of games, some people that adults needs to have a game, because it has many advantages for hem. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight.
First and the most important reason is that the game decrease out routine pressures. We are living in a stress-rich environment, so it is quite normal we need recreation for filling our spare time and being relaxed. For achieve this, playing game is the better solution, which allow us to be far from the reality for some hours. I think that there is not a better example then myself when I was studying to enter the university. At that time, I have to study many books, and some of them were difficult like history. When I was exhausted of memorize contents of books, play badminton with my close friends refill me with fresh energy to continue my studies. Although, I never won in these games, because my partnership was an excellent player in this field of sport, it had positive impacts on me for being relaxed.
A further point we must consider is that we can improve our relationship and communication with others by participating in team games. Indeed, sharing laughs and fun can foster empathy, compassion, trust and intimacy with playing a game with others. In addition, it allows you to make more friends and be close more with others. I think that a small instance can give some light on this matter. In the university I always was a shy child, who was not able to make friend with others. However, joining in the university volleyball team allowed me to have more communication with others because the intimacy atmosphere in the team broke my ice easily.
Apart from point I made above, the game increase the level of our health. In fact, Intellectual games strengthen our brain power and allow us to better think and concentrate. Physical indoor games like table tennis or outdoor games like football lead our blood to circulate better in our body and allows us to burn excess fats, which are the main cause of many diseases like diabetes, heart attack, or even stroke. The biggest advantages of playing game lies in the fact that keeps us healthy and improve quality of our life.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that the game relieves our stress, improves our social skills, and keeps us health. Of course, an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who take the opposite view are partly reasonable that some of games like video games may have negative effects on people. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that its advantages for adults outweigh dangerous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...ght on this matter. In the university I always was a shy child, who was not able to make f...
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Line 9, column 274, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the games') or simply say ''some games''.
Suggestion: some of the games; some games
...pposite view are partly reasonable that some of games like video games may have negative effe...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23506743738 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.150289017341 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0847784200385 0.0866891130778 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0481695568401 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0847784200385 0.0685040099705 124% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125240847784 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0269749518304 0.0351676179071 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55752254146 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0231213872832 0.0309702414327 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0019267822736 0.00188951952338 102% => OK
Determiners: 0.0828516377649 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00963391136802 0.0209618222197 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0134874759152 0.0139019557991 97% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2673.0 2387.08602151 112% => OK
No of words: 460.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81086956522 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330434782609 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247826086957 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.15 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0847826086957 0.112833075102 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55752254146 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536956521739 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 63.4691936248 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7254897828 48.84282405 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.217391304 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 44.7826086957 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.36734693878 1.45489161554 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224341548867 0.300154397459 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0944722189944 0.103427244359 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0714554832773 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.464879176283 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12502009151 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754740427903 0.114077575197 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363773272569 0.0781384742642 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.288344234454 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0351341466012 0.067059652881 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143595696857 0.210909579961 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293827590253 0.0618886996521 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.