Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
From my perspective, the government should spend more money to support the arts rather than the athletics because its unique role that successfully cultivate people's sympathy and empower the audience.
To begin with, arts can cultivate people's empathy. Empathy is the capacity to feel each other's emotions and feelings, and can make people from different background feel connected and never be isolated. And arts is the medium that those artists use to express their own private but valuable feelings, and through arts, the audience can feel the connection between themselves and the artists even the artist may already died thousands years ago. That is why people can be more empathetic after appreciating masterpieces made by artists. Take the Death of Red Masque as an example. It is a novel written by Edgar Ellen Poe. Although it is a 19th century novel based on the Medieval times, readers can easily feel the strong emotions like fear, doubt and disillusion from the novel, and it is exactly the experience that people can strengthen their ability of empathy.
In addition, arts have the power to calm people, and to soothe the distress as well as the despair of human beings. Thomas De Quincey once said in his article that there are two types of literature, the literature of power and the literature of knowledge. The former refers to those masterpieces like Hamlet and Moby Dick, and the latter refers to those texts books like the Principles of Economics or Linear Algebra, and in his opinion the former is the true art. What De Quincey wants to express is that unlike literature of knowledge that can give readers nothing but definations and theories, the true arts can give readers the power that can release their distress and make them more sanguine about the future life. Life is like Sisyphus who kept pushing the huge stone up to the top of the mountain but could never succeed. Our life is meaningless, but it is the arts that give us the power and the courage to carry on. When we feel really down, we can read poems written by Shirley and feel the beauty of nature and the beauty of life; When we lose help, we can watch Blue Light, and find that we may be can also saved by a magical blue light; When we break up with lover, we can watch the Breathless, and find that there are much more interesting things than having a relationship. And that is the significance of arts.
I have to admit that athletics also bring a lot of benefits to the country and to its people. For example, watching the football competition between one's own nation and a foreign nation can help the audience to build a sense of belonging and to cultivate patriotism towards the motherland. But still, the arts have much more long-lasting and more significant influence on people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, still, then, well, for example, in addition, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76811594203 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52284207913 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505175983437 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.9185947037 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.210526316 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4210526316 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0974583559787 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319175680689 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563303114629 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933260293171 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910504384456 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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