Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A government should spend money on the welfare of society. Choosing a budget from one sector to another always requires a high planning activity. In my opinion, govt. should spend money more on sports than arts because of physical exercise and Olympic medals which would make the whole nation proud.
First, the main reason to support athletics is the health issue. People who play sports can improve their health and can save money by not buying medicine. For example, a few days ago, my uncle told his one child to play basketball and another child to play football. Now, every evening they use to play in the playground without spending time in video games and watching video streamings. It will definitely improve their health in long term. They will save their money by not going to hospitals and not buying medicines. And also they can be able to live longer. Now because of the govt. support many parents are encouraging their children to play and earn medals in Olympics. This clearly illustrates that govt. should spend more money in sport-related activites.
Second, to sponsor on athletics such as state Olympic team, a nation can be proud. For instance, India did not win any medals in the last Olympics in London. This year in TOKYO Olympics, India won 1 gold, 2 silvers, and 4 bronzes. This has been possible because the Indian govt spends a huge amount of budget on supporting athletics at last year. This support encourages many young to pursue their sports-related future. In my view, In the next Olympics, India will earn more medals than this year if the support from the govt. becomes consistent.
Third, if the govt. take initiatives to make more playgrounds or parks by cleaning old playgrounds and parks, it will increase the beauty of nature of the city. It can also include many indoor game facilities such as chess or brainstorming games that will improve the brain activities of the people. However, Arts are also important for society and Art should be given the next priority. If the health is okay, people will practice art more intelligently and creatively.
In conclusion, with the above in my mind, in long run, promoting sports especially state-sponsored Olympic teams, will lead to the betterment of all involved because of health-related benefits and the whole nation's pride.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, third, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95897435897 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6211048556 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528205128205 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.109788816 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6296296296 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4444444444 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237767124752 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604419967243 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663878757617 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126338006077 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492447820967 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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