Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that for the governments, spending more money in supporting arts is more valuable than supporting athletics. However, I would definitely be against such a statement. To me, supporting atheletics is much more benificial to the public for the following several reasons.
To begin with, I want to argue that arts will take much more money to have an achievement. Take myself as an example. When I was a kid, I tried both arts like drawing and athletics such as swimming and basketball. My family spent a lot of money on the painting materials, e.g., different sizes of papers, various colors of crayons, and distinct softness of brushes. In contrast, to afford me to play basketball, my family only needed to buy a cheap ball from the supermarket that appears everywhere in the city and find a basketball field, which is also quite common in the communities. Therefore, arts are much more costly than sports, so the government will spent much more on arts to get the same result.
Besides this, another reason for supporting athletics is that the majority of people can enjoy sports. For arts, only talented individuals such as experts can distinguish which kinds of paintings are more delicated and should receive more attention. It is hard for the public to enjoy the arts without enough knowledge about this field. At the same time, even a elementary school student can distinguish which runner is the fastest and which football player goals the most. Hence, sports can be enjoyed by most people and is therefore much more benificial.
At last, sponsering team sports like football and basketball can also encourage the youth to cooperate with each other. As long as such state-sponsered Olympic teams become popular in the television, they will also try such team sports. Such enrollment will make the students more socialized and is extremely benificial for them. However, most artists are typically along and hide them from the public. If students all try to isolate them with each other, it is bad for their personal developments and for their socialization progress.
Despite sponsering arts also have its own advantages such as keeping people away from violence which the sports may fail to, its disadvantage such as being too costly, making the public unable to enjoy, and making the youth isolated from each other too so great to be ignored. To conclude, among arts and athletics, I will definitely choose athletics to fund.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, e.g., hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02200488998 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70690514085 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535452322738 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6801842637 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8095238095 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236054546737 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071743205936 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730890911799 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139255685967 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911913679738 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.